Some people believe that children's leisure activities must be educational, otherwise they are a complete waste of time.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your experience.
Some people are of the view that children in their free time must also be involved in such activities which are some way or the other related to their curriculum.
According to me, they are right because in this competing society where everyone is thriving to achieve their dreams could be a hard task to play by. In order to make your self fit perfectly in this society you need to get your educational level to the maximum. So, in order to achieve that you need to start paying attention on your child's extra curricular active as well. Firstly and most importantly, it is an Internet era, our child should be computer savvy in order to meet this society's expectation. To do that they should be involve in directly or indirectly into educational activities willingly. For instance, my daughter who just turned 4 is on the brighter side in her class because of her involvement in games and other activities which circles her educational domain. She can smoothly pick up on any difficult word being taught at school because of the educational sites and videos she visits and explores. Moreover, at this age she is fluently expressing her self in English which is not her her mother's tongue. Furthermore, she can easily explain alphabets in sign language because of the video she has been watching on YouTube. So much so, that before entering school in her kindergarten she had full command on poems. This all happened because of her involvement in educational sites. Not only computer, children should be motivated to play educational games with their fellow mates as well. This further enhances their skills and polishes their mind. The more the critically think about certain things the more they will efficiently solve their problems in future.
On the contrary, children should be playing other games and activities as well, but the more they are involved around educational circle the better it is for their future.
To sum it up, children should be involved directly indirectly into educational activities in order to improve their minds and skills further.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This phrase can sound awkward in English. Consider using 'in my opinion' or 'I think'.
Suggestion: In my opinion; I think
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Message: Did you mean 'involved'?
Suggestion: involved
... expectation. To do that they should be involve in directly or indirectly into educatio...
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Suggestion: her
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Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...y will efficiently solve their problems in future. On the contrary, children should be...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, moreover, so, well, for instance, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 24.0651302605 199% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1724.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 348.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95402298851 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64017759244 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537356321839 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 535.5 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.3387134491 49.4020404114 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.411764706 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4705882353 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.47058823529 7.06120827912 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147690496448 0.244688304435 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0533586496944 0.084324248473 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0520411909807 0.0667982634062 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114186366902 0.151304729494 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0365794424323 0.056905535591 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.58950901804 88% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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