Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both of these views and give your opinion.
While some people hold the view that people should try to adapt an acceptable situation, others believe that they should struggle to overcome such a situation. In my opinion, I believe that people should not give up in a difficult situation.
On one side of the argument, there are people who would argue that acceptance would be the best solution for the difficulties. The major reason for believing this is that if people do not accept a bad situation, they will experience the stress in their everyday life which could harm the physical and mental wellbeing. People in an unpleasant situation, for instance, usually have a bad temper that could effect the social communication in society. In addition, according to the recent survey report from Myanmar Medical Institute, 75% of heart attack diseases are due to excessive stress and people would require to accept a bad condition in order to reduce the stress.
Despite the above arguments, I am of the position that the problems and difficulties should be overcome. Indeed, one reason why I am holding this view is that these situations are creating opportunities for people. This means that people get a higher level in society after they have successfully solved an unacceptable situation. A company staff who is not happy with his basic salary, for example, tries his best to get promotion and after getting promoted, he not only solves his problem with money but also gains a higher position in the organization. It is also my opinion that the process of struggling to overcome difficulties would steeply improve the learning curve and this will make people mature and more knowledgeable.
In conclusion, while both views are commonly held in society, I believe that a bad situation is not something to give up but it is an opportunity to overcome. Given this situation, it is recommended that despite the side effects, people should always put their best efforts to face the situation that they are not happy with.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 406, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[6]
Message: Did you mean 'affect'?
Suggestion: affect
...e, usually have a bad temper that could effect the social communication in society. In...
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Line 3, column 615, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'accepting'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: accepting
...cessive stress and people would require to accept a bad condition in order to reduce the ...
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Line 5, column 96, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'overcome'?
Suggestion: overcome
...the problems and difficulties should be overcome. Indeed, one reason why I am holding th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, well, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 38.0 24.0651302605 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 8.3376753507 252% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1652.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 331.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99093655589 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76923115929 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519637462236 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 520.2 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 42.9839656357 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.076923077 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4615384615 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.69230769231 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267731636345 0.244688304435 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0958926012386 0.084324248473 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0660810649854 0.0667982634062 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17130239941 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0594301761467 0.056905535591 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.0946893788 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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