Some people believe that success in life depends on hard work and determination, while other believe that other factors like money and personal appearance are important.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Getting success these days can be a bit tricky. Living in a technological age, can provide someone a taste of success within a day or it may even take years for them to get it. Though it is perceived by some that being successful entirely depends on a good financial background or for some it may be because of the amazing physical looks they have, but for me, these factors can be temporary as they may be of no use because of lack of experience carried by the individuals having them. In my opinion, working hard is more important and it plays a vital role as a person with these qualities can get along even during his/her bad time.
Money and good looks do possess a power through which someone can get success or even may get famous. But this may not last long enough because of little or no experience at all. They would not have tasted the ground realities and would not be able to take proper decisions. Moreover, they would not be good enough to put their assets in proper place as they would not have earned them. It would have been merely granted to them by their family members. Consequently, it may lead to bad decisions made by them which may have hazardous effects on their well being, as well as their future. To illustrate, Anil Ambani, an Indian billionaire, who owned Reliance Telecom which he got as a gift from his father, recent got bankrupt as he never made ample efforts towards doing good for the company. Also, when it comes to looks, people who work in fashion industry for instance, tend to have shorter career in comparison with those belonging to any other area of work.
Coming to the other part, getting succeeded in life requires hard work, a lot of determination, and focusing in one direction. It is because they stick to the ground even when they have nothing left with them. It is their will power and the live reality of things, which makes them powerful enough to follow their dreams. The answer lies in all the efforts made by the individuals who work not just to earn basic things, but are there to make something out of their life. They have already been thorough tough situations and because of this they don’t have fear inside them and they are ready to take risks. This in turn, makes them wiser as they are aware of all the integrities and scenarios. They carry their vision with them and as a result, they portray their leadership skills in front of their society and timely prove that there is no shortcut to success. But only, hard work and determination. To exemplify, Bansal brothers were the first in India to bring an online e-commerce platform to shop things. They made a fortune with just an idea, without even having the funds to start the business.
To conclude, yes, money and appearance can make someone richer and do good with their life but I believe that would be for a short period of time. In order to earn success permanently, one has to go through rough paths. As they say, Rome was not build in a day.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: period
...but I believe that would be for a short period of time. In order to earn success permanently, ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... they say, Rome was not build in a day.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, look, may, moreover, so, well, as to, for instance, as a result, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 7.85571142285 255% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 22.0 10.4138276553 211% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 24.0651302605 266% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 41.998997996 169% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2452.0 1615.20841683 152% => OK
No of words: 540.0 315.596192385 171% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.54074074074 5.12529762239 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82057051367 4.20363070211 115% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36290708746 2.80592935109 84% => OK
Unique words: 267.0 176.041082164 152% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494444444444 0.561755894193 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 756.9 506.74238477 149% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 16.0721442886 156% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.7610288843 49.4020404114 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.08 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.04 7.06120827912 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.112275906908 0.244688304435 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0374786329335 0.084324248473 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0545063938031 0.0667982634062 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0779276476555 0.151304729494 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0227435229607 0.056905535591 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 13.0946893788 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 50.2224549098 134% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.05 12.4159519038 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 78.4519038076 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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