Some people believe that success in life depends on hard work and determination, while other believe that others factors like money and appearance are important.
Discuss both the views and give your opinion.
People often discuss about ways and qualities required to become successful. Some say that it is their focus towards their career along with their efforts that make them successful for the reason that it helps them to gain the required skill set and confidence. While others say that money along with good appearance can play an instrumental role in tasting success as these physical qualities provides them with larger opportunities to do good with their career. In my opinion, both of them are crucial at their part and play a vital role in getting across the line.
Talking about looks and financial aid first, these features can be meaningful in their own way. We all know that money mints money. And this exclusive feature provides individual with wider range of opportunities. For instance, for share market broker whose job requires them to invest frequently and on a large scale, extra funding would be more fruitful, as with more money they would be able to earn more. Therefore, this enables them to make their future better and eradicate the stress level in order to keep good with their mental health. Similarly, for people whose career depends on how they look, appearance is of an utmost importance. They need to look according to their nature of work as it demands them to be presentable and beautiful.
Coming to hard work and determination, for some, these are the key elements in achieving desired goals. They make a person more confident and blesses him/her not only with skill, but also with focus in order to taste success. These skills and confidence later helps them to achieve fruitful outcomes. And even after being rich, it is only their hard work and determination to achieve next goal that makes them continue on their successive path. Hence, if they had to face a similar situation with no money by their side, they would still manage to do good in those circumstances and come out of them by succeeding again. To quote an example, famous celebrity Mr. Amitabh Bachchan never belonged to a rich family, but because of these attributes, he became successful actor. Infact, there was a time when he was about to become bankrupt, but he never gave up, worked harder and became more successful.
To conclude, people have their own methods and ways to get what they want. For some, these may be physical factors like money and appearance, while for others, hard work and determination would be of more importance. As per me, all of these are equally important as they provide us with enhanced options. Money would definitely fetch more money, but without hard work and determination, no one till date has been able to get what he/she wants, apart from a lucky gambler.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 643, Rule ID: FAMOUS_CELEBRITY[1]
Message: Use simply 'celebrity'.
Suggestion: celebrity
... succeeding again. To quote an example, famous celebrity Mr. Amitabh Bachchan never belonged to ...
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Line 13, column 473, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
.../she wants, apart from a lucky gambler.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, look, may, similarly, so, still, therefore, while, apart from, for instance, talking about, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 10.4138276553 221% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 24.0651302605 258% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 41.998997996 155% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2250.0 1615.20841683 139% => OK
No of words: 461.0 315.596192385 146% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88069414317 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63367139033 4.20363070211 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51566489869 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 176.041082164 142% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542299349241 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 699.3 506.74238477 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 6.0 0.809619238477 741% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0721442886 137% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.395833292 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.272727273 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9545454545 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.09090909091 7.06120827912 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 8.67935871743 242% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147735330925 0.244688304435 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0474123457648 0.084324248473 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.044796746179 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100212557878 0.151304729494 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0355248149744 0.056905535591 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 12.4159519038 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 78.4519038076 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.