Some people believe that the whole family (grandparents, uncles, aunts) bringing up children is better rather than only parents.
Discuss both the views and give your opinion.
Though this may not carry much weight as it can be termed as a general or natural activity, but upbringing of a child these days, can be a hefty task. A better part of society still believes that more the number of family members, better it is for a child for the reason that it contributes in making them smarter. But there is a section of people who perceive this notion as dangerous. According to them this may prove out to be chaotic for their children, and therefore they make sure that their child interacts with others only on occasional basis. In my opinion, the latter one is a better way as it makes sure that the child is safe and away from having disturbing life experiences.
On one hand, there is no denying in the fact that not just parents, but other family members also play a crucial role in overall development of a child. It makes them socially acceptable as they would be inculcated with learnings, something that may have not been provided to them by their parents per se, but instilled in them by any other relative. Moreover, this practice plays an instrumental role in development of cognitive abilities in a child as grandparents are known to teach their grandchildren using practical games and making them aware of good and bad in daily chores. All these extra curricular activities along with support of elder people, evidently, makes children smarter and sets them apart from crowd, ultimately resulting in creating a better future for them. To exemplify, according to the research conducted by IIM Ahmedabad last year on working class couples, results revealed that kids who got the opportunity to spend time with some other family members, made their way to become more understanding. When asked, researchers made a point that every one has a different aspect of looking at things, and when pass on to our child, it makes them think with a different perspective.
On the other hand, people who are of the mindset that only parents should take responsibility of bringing up their children, think that this will make sure there children are safe. In today’s world, where we have witnessed some disturbing cases wherein children are sexually abused in their childhood, letting our offspring to be with some one else can prove out to be a nightmare. This will not only create a detrimental impact on the child’s physical health, but will also cause adverse effect on their mental health. In certain situations, children are not even able to reveal these situations to their parents where they are forcefully taken up by their so called relatives for the reason that this will impact their family relations. Consequently, it makes them hurt so bad, that their entire adulthood gets wasted in hating themselves. To illustrate, Akarsh Mehta, a psychiatrist from AIMS New Delhi, elaborated a story about his patient on national television. He explained how his patient’s maternal uncle sexually abused him for number of years. The repercussions came out to be so bad of this information, that he had to commit suicide.
To conclude, growing up in a joint family does have its advantages as one can be taught in multiple ways, which affects their learning capabilities in positive manner. Having said that, a huge risk exists in today’s dramatic world wherein children are sexually exploited and this generates the bigger question. Should we allow other family members to take care of our children? Hence, in order to avoid these circumstances, I think that parents must make sure that they are the only one raising their children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, hence, if, look, may, moreover, so, still, therefore, apart from, i think, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 13.1623246493 167% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 24.0 7.30460921844 329% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 78.0 24.0651302605 324% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 80.0 41.998997996 190% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2970.0 1615.20841683 184% => OK
No of words: 603.0 315.596192385 191% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92537313433 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.9554069778 4.20363070211 118% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70225849811 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 309.0 176.041082164 176% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512437810945 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 924.3 506.74238477 182% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 0.809619238477 865% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.76152304609 231% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 16.0721442886 143% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 48.2520164226 49.4020404114 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.130434783 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2173913043 20.7667163134 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.73913043478 7.06120827912 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.138487723066 0.244688304435 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0443754347519 0.084324248473 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0421961075307 0.0667982634062 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0939526876439 0.151304729494 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0264941309839 0.056905535591 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 50.2224549098 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 146.0 78.4519038076 186% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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