Some people claim that public museums and art galleries will not be needed because people can see historical objects and works of art by using a computer. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Spanning thousands of years, materials, now preserved and exhibited in museums and art galleries are the witnesses of history, the memoirs of the fall and down of civilizations, empires and their cultural value. Some individuals believed that it is worthless to display in the showroom rather than watching on TV or computer. This essay refutes that claim and asserts the significant position of encouraging people engaging in visiting museums to observe the artifacts.
On the one hand, ancient artifacts obsess various value embracing humane and scientific value. For scientific purposes, museums are the place in which scientists can sustain and preserve systematically and secure the objects from burglars. These artifacts serve the scientific research dealing with different study fields as architecture, anthropology, history, geometry, archeology… New knowledge which are exposed and prove serve the future research or lecture in school to boost the youthful generation to understand about the prior or natural event. Not only the scientific purposes, historical artifacts displaying showrooms and museums act as a role of the inspiration to people who wish to perceive about history. In the space of museums, observers surrounding by artifacts have a nostalgia sense about past events cannot be found when watching on TV or computer and hence internally emerging a situation desiring to explore. These sentiments are the initial foundation for people to find again historical values, specially the young generations, the people need to understand about the history of their nation.
On the other hand, museums and art galleries are the positions attracting visitors. These tourists bring the immense wealth to to governmental budget, especially in the cities where the museums cited in. This cultural tourism not only attracts tourists come to visit museums, it also invites them to visit other tourist attractions in these cities. More visitors come, nations are more success in marketing national figures to international friends. For example, in Hanoi, Vietnam, the museum system of the capital city successfully transmit cultural value of Vietnam. Nowadays, more people realize about Vietnam as a friendly nation with the hospitable tradition and featured symbols as Ao dai, Pho… Vietnamese museums are the modest part in the international museum system. In nations obsessing artifacts about huge ancient civilizations as Roman, Persian, Ancient Greek, Mesopotamian… attract considerable amounts of guests each year.
In conclusion, the perspective advocating the remove of museums and art galleries is unreasonable. By contrast, their existence benefit to various objects, therefore nations should build up modern museum systems to thrive national interest.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, if, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 41.998997996 143% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2382.0 1615.20841683 147% => OK
No of words: 408.0 315.596192385 129% => OK
Chars per words: 5.83823529412 5.12529762239 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.29733207866 2.80592935109 118% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 176.041082164 139% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.598039215686 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 727.2 506.74238477 144% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.4618211722 49.4020404114 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.117647059 106.682146367 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.52941176471 7.06120827912 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194387642824 0.244688304435 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.061629188701 0.084324248473 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0513131544113 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118995903973 0.151304729494 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0340253492434 0.056905535591 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 13.0946893788 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.2 50.2224549098 60% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.89 12.4159519038 136% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.63 8.58950901804 124% => OK
difficult_words: 150.0 78.4519038076 191% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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