Most families find it necessary for both parents to work out of the home to meet demands of this competitive world. I agree that children in these families enjoy the extra earning; however, I also believe they miss out on their parents support.
Children, who come from families where both parents work, enjoy a luxurious life; most of their demands are met; they travel often; have better education opportunities, and are financially secure. This is because of the extra earning that allows such families to afford the luxuries of life. For instance, if the father’s salary pays for house expenses, the mother’s can be used for holidays or other luxuries. This is an advantage because when families are financially stable, there is less stress in the home, bringing about a peaceful environment for children to grow up in and reducing the possibility of stress related conditions to both parents and children.
On the flip side, working parents do not know how their children spend their time in their absence. For example, when parents come home from work, they are exhausted and do not spend time with their children. This is a problem and children may resort to seeking guidance from friends or television and may be influenced by peer pressure or join gangs, increasing the rate of school dropouts. A balance between work and family is mandatory for the well being of children.
In conclusion, a luxurious life is not sufficient; children need their parents’ guidance and support as they grow. It is the responsibility of parents to make sure they are aware of the happenings in their children’s life and guide them accordingly.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 119, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[9]
Message: The adverb 'often' is usually put before the verb 'travel'.
Suggestion: often travel
...fe; most of their demands are met; they travel often; have better education opportunities, a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, however, if, may, so, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1389.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 274.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06934306569 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82508391961 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.551094890511 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 424.8 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.9139129644 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.75 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8333333333 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.25 7.06120827912 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203411102617 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100142260239 0.084324248473 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106577570799 0.0667982634062 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141999354547 0.151304729494 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0738297764369 0.056905535591 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 78.4519038076 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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