Some people feel that entertainers such as film stars, pop musicians or sports stars are paid too much money.Do you agree or disagree?Which other types of job should be highly paid? (The answer is a sample not written by myself. The goal is to compare the

Nowadays many people and media reporters have focused on salary of some famous persons like film stars, music artist and sport athletes. They claim that the payment to these people is unfair which is originated from some certain reasons. In my opinion these industries have been paid more than a normal level and this could be balanced because of following proofs:
First of all, the income for employees is based on the skills they have and how much these skills are unique the wage would be increased. But many of the famous people do not have any outstanding or valuable expertise and often they just enter to the market by their investment. Even many general persons have precious talents but they could not promote in entertaining context because of many aspects. On the other hand many of these well-known artists are many undesirable characteristics in comparison with society’s culture and even they are outlaw. For example there is a news in every week about an actor who has driven drunk or a singer who passed away because of using drugs. So we can see that the income for these bad behavior entertainers are in a highly calculated range.
Secondly, we know that in economics there is equalizer between input and output of every industry. It means that people who are active in any definite market have earned money based on the revenue of their activity. In this topic we should compare the value generated from the entertaining companies with some other producing environments like automobile, computer knowledge and medical. A simple review demonstrates a noticeable gap among the benefits of these valuable industries with music, movie and sport. For example a science researcher in health context who discover a medicine for a killing disease presents an invaluable gift to human being which could not be considered even with any regular pop singing.

In conclusion, with mentioned reasons and some other proofs I agree with this statement that says we should change the structure of income calculation for people based on their talents, expertise and finally the value offered to the universe.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, second, secondly, so, well, for example, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1772.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 351.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04843304843 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63272220479 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561253561254 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 575.1 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.0692307219 49.4020404114 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.571428571 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0714285714 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.07142857143 7.06120827912 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156565906054 0.244688304435 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0518557869177 0.084324248473 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0351167745773 0.0667982634062 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100805965663 0.151304729494 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0329794923915 0.056905535591 58% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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