some people give more importance to artists (painter, writers, musicians) in the current age of rapidly developing technology and science. What do you think? Do people prefer arts to technology in your view?
In a world where scientific and technological advances dominated, people working in the arts are considered, having significant impacts on many persons. The essay will discuss my viewpoints and trend individuals more interesting art or technology than.
There are many factors, which appear in my brain about the consideration. First of all, Youngers are biased by artists from their internet accounts when technology and science are rapidly developed. Taking idols k-pop, who is the current object on mass media, as a prime example, Netizens publicize for them; accordingly, fans are impacted by their fashion trend and many sold-out items. Furthermore, many famous icon brands will invite idols to purpose advertisement and ambassadors through social media in high- tech age. In addition, people working in art and scientific advancements still need to support together; in other words, if artists want to create a new product, they will force to spend a long time and be fixed by high-tech apps. In contrast, when the technology and science field debuts a new item, they will need to use artists' popularities to promote this product's recognition.
In my thought, almost everyone in the world will choose the tech and science field instead of the arts. First, humans' life condition will be improved by high-tech items like domestic robots, computers, and smartphones; indeed, no one can sustain when high-tech products disappear in the current age of scientific advancements, and their lives will become chaotic. Next, technology helps t easy for people to find suitable jobs; moreover, their income increases and the immigration of innercity rate declines.
In conclusion, I think that artists and technological fields support development together; furthermore, standard living also rises higher than depends on technology and science.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, furthermore, if, moreover, so, still, i think, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1557.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 285.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.46315789474 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91655572932 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.635087719298 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 468.0 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.4859716489 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.75 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.75 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.25 7.06120827912 173% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196104478781 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0753493759197 0.084324248473 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0525597039623 0.0667982634062 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135322473945 0.151304729494 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0365877823109 0.056905535591 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.32 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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