Some people say that advertising encourages to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which view point you agree with. Give reasons with example.
People are divided between the opinion that whether companies sponsoring sports as a mean of advertisement is beneficial
or not. In my opinion, advertisement of products through sports has more disadvantages. To begin with, sponsorship of sports is beneficial at certain level. Young children with a keen interest in any specific sport are unable to showcase their skills to attract the eye of selectors in order to get selected for national team.
When companies sponsor sports at school or college level, students get a chance to play in competition at inter college
or inter school level and have a higher probability to catch eye of selectors. Sponsorship generates revenue for the sports and allows to bear the expenses of arranging tournaments among different schools or colleges, which is not possible from institution funding as it is limited. For example, Hassan Raza (Pakistan cricketer) got the eye of a selector while playing at college level. He got the chance to play for Pakistan team at international level at the age of 16 which is still the record for any player to play at international level.
On the other hand, there are more commercial aspects of sponsorship which have negative effects. Many sports personalities
have huge fan following and these fans adopt their attributes without thinking about its effect especially young children. Companies use the fame of the famous sportsmen to sell their products, who are enticed by handsome amount of money, in fact they earn much more by advertisements than their salaries. Therefore to earn more money sportmen agree to advertise for any company and sometimes become their brand ambassador. Sometimes the product of these companies is harmful for the health of people. For instance, advertisements showing the intake of carbonated drinks after sports.
In conclusion, sponsorship of sports for commercial purposes has more detrimental effects than positive.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 136, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'bearing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: bearing
...rates revenue for the sports and allows to bear the expenses of arranging tournaments a...
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Line 6, column 307, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
... by advertisements than their salaries. Therefore to earn more money sportmen agree to ad...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, still, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 7.85571142285 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1628.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 307.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30293159609 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94776935733 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579804560261 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 504.0 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.4609191688 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.533333333 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4666666667 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.06666666667 7.06120827912 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.38176352705 160% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0890819360016 0.244688304435 36% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0388552854816 0.084324248473 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0274147883688 0.0667982634062 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0450370194204 0.151304729494 30% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0353904550198 0.056905535591 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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