Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
The declining level of public health has become a serious issue in modern times. It is believed that an increasing number of sports facilities can tackle this issue. However, others believe this approach would not be enough to enhance citizens' fitness. In my opinion, there are a few more important measures that might be more productive and should be considered.
To begin with, the main reason why people support the notion that additional sports facilities are the best way to improve public health is the fact that accessible local sports facilities can attract residents and persuade them to be more physically active and, as a result, to become healthier. Unfortunately, nowadays citizens tend to lead a sedentary lifestyle, walk less, do desk jobs, and spend their leisure time watching TV or playing computer games. Therefore, people should be encouraged to exercise by convenient sports facilities in the neighborhood. Nevertheless, it is possible that sports establishments would attract already fit residents and be ignored by people who are not interested in sport at all but should improve their fitness.
Therefore, other measures to enhance public health are required. Firstly, a healthy diet is essential to keep fit. The government should regulate the fast-food industry the same way it has already regulated the tobacco and alcohol industries. Besides, unhealthy foods and snacks should be banned from schools' menus. Secondly, it is important to educate children about the way to maintain a healthy lifestyle by doing sports and having a healthy diet. This approach allows to bring up sensible next generations. Finally, public transportation should be improved in order to persuade people to use buses or the subway instead of cars. The reason there is that people walk more to bus stations than to their cars and this kind of exercise can become a healthy habit.
In conclusion, additional sports facilities may help to enhance public health. However, it is not the best approach there. In my opinion, developed public transportation, strict regulations of tobacco, alcohol and fast food industries, and proper education of the next generation are more effective in tackling the problem of the decrease in population health.
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1894.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 357.0 315.596192385 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30532212885 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85307284122 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53781512605 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 583.2 506.74238477 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.9152399255 49.4020404114 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.6842105263 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7894736842 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.89473684211 7.06120827912 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263354346918 0.244688304435 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0857081141009 0.084324248473 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0721982281946 0.0667982634062 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170758723014 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0147481736758 0.056905535591 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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