Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organised group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themsleves on their own.
Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
There is no doubt that childre should do a better use on their fee time as much sooner a they can to explore possibilities and develop skills for the future self. In order to do so, one idead is that parents should push their youngsters to encounter a group to do some activities; on the other hand, some think that it is crucial, in the young ages, to create a sense of occupation by yourself. This essay will approach these two views and support why parents should incite their sons to reunite in groups.
To begin with, there ae some who argue that it is a great a idea to let infants choose, on their own, what to do in their free period. This could be a healthy exercize to them because the activities will be based on what they like and realize as able to to make them happy and successful. For example, studies in American institutions have found that 40% of the childs that tray new thing based on their likes are going to be a success in the adulthood. However, there are cases which can not ignore regarding that children have a undevelop sense of what is right, wrong, harmful or essencial. To enlight this matter, the news often report missing children near playgrounds and reason is a person who invites them to play into his house and they accept whitout a doubt.
Nevertheless, I would argue that parents must boost the intants in activities since they will act in their son's and daughter's best interest, but, even if they they do not, the young one will evaluate and criticize that choose. For instance, my mother really wanted my to enter in dance classes and, even though my sibling never danced before, she tryed and realized that this was not meant for her. Moreover, whereas a parent know what a child must focus on learning, the youngsters will only care about what pleases themselves and will no nurture a sense of responsability and to surpass the need of doing activities to see others happy. To corroborate this argument, studies shown that children who was forced by their parents to some activity that they dislike are more willing to help those who need it.
In conclusion, although a child should be able to choose their actions in free time alone as a way to develop an autocriticism, I believe that this must be a role for the parents since they will act in their son's best interest and choose an activity wiser than the youngters.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, really, regarding, so, whereas, as for, for example, for instance, in conclusion, no doubt, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 7.85571142285 255% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 7.30460921844 246% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 55.0 24.0651302605 229% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 41.998997996 136% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1946.0 1615.20841683 120% => OK
No of words: 427.0 315.596192385 135% => OK
Chars per words: 4.55737704918 5.12529762239 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42854997405 2.80592935109 87% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 176.041082164 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529274004684 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 594.0 506.74238477 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.2975951904 158% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 45.8465410412 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.692307692 106.682146367 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.8461538462 20.7667163134 158% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.7692307692 7.06120827912 181% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24418311226 0.244688304435 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0939937076506 0.084324248473 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0580968805552 0.0667982634062 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163024865191 0.151304729494 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0406301520139 0.056905535591 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 13.0946893788 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.92 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.76 12.4159519038 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.1190380762 146% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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