Some people say that parent should encourage their children to take part in organised group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
In the salad days of the millennium, society is polarized into two groups almost equally. Regarding The notion that, whether parent should encourage their children to participate organised group activities or motive them to build their own career himself/herself. however, different people have their distinct mindset. In my opinion, kids should take part in organised group activities to socialize themselves. The following paragraph's would shed light on both the views and explain these with an apt example.
To begin with the first notion, there are myriad things to share in its favor. Firstly, according to some people, children's need to take part more social activities to learn society and nation's cultures and behaviors. Therefore, kids can learn how to behave with older and other people from childhood. For example, attending more social organised group programs they can mixed others at their age and make friendship. As a result, if there will have any crisis in society or their own they can help each others. In addition, children can learn various team building activities like working in a group competition with their peers, coping up with pressures etc.
shifting towards the second thought of school, according to some other people adolescents should be independent in choosing their activities in free times. this means, this give children freedom of thought and children can learn take up challenges and responsibilities. Hence, there is a possibility that certain children take up wrong routes. For instance, due to the advancement, children are more prone themselves to play video games, socialize them more on the internet.
To conclude, it is important for children to find a way to keep themselves occupied on their own. however, parents should also encourage them to engage in group activities because such activities help to improve their health and overall personality.s occupied doing their own things.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, hence, however, if, regarding, second, so, then, therefore, for example, for instance, in addition, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1731.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 322.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37577639752 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7582622934 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574534161491 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 513.9 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.9869905275 49.4020404114 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.1666666667 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8888888889 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.05555555556 7.06120827912 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.484795425671 0.244688304435 198% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.138836276165 0.084324248473 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0901725014645 0.0667982634062 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.304748710622 0.151304729494 201% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0611097082011 0.056905535591 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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