Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organised group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience
To begin with, parents motivate their children to participate in group activities that will give them a positive outcome. when children will boost confidence in their children Participate in group activities, their confidence increases because they interact with a lot of other children. they learn teamwork, which will help them in the future. My personal experience is the compelling example of this. When I was in school, I used to be a very shy person. One day, my teacher called my parents and ask to encourage me to participate in annual function. So, I took part in group dance and drama competitions, where I interacted with other students. It helped me a lot to remove my phobia to perform on stage in front of lot of people . Also, it increased my confidence. Therefore, Parents encourage their children to participate in group activities.
Conversely, children should not forget to learn how to manage their time. Because parents are not always there with them for teaching and pushing them to how and when to do the thing by themselves. Let us take an example of my best friend. When she was young, her parents always guided her in everything. Apparently, she got admission in a foreign university. when she stayed alone, she faced many problems by doing things on her own. Therefore, children require some encouragement, support to do their work.
In conclusion, children should know what they want to learn, how they want to learn by themselves. Nevertheless, parents support and encouragement to thier cere are multiple heated discussions on this topic which states that parents should stimulate their children to participate in curriculum activities when they have spare time after studies. As for everything, there are always different views from different people on this topic. Personally, I believe that it is very important for the development of brain of children to do some physical activities such as playing sports.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, conversely, if, nevertheless, so, therefore, as for, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 24.0651302605 199% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1639.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 319.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13793103448 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90741911968 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529780564263 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 499.5 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.3649889356 49.4020404114 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.0476190476 106.682146367 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.1904761905 20.7667163134 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.14285714286 7.06120827912 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.357628943545 0.244688304435 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100767596932 0.084324248473 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102155877261 0.0667982634062 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.238986801253 0.151304729494 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0396879538508 0.056905535591 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 13.0946893788 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 50.2224549098 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.94 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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