Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organised group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
There has been an increasing debate as to whether children should be encouraged to participate in organised group activities or they should be free to choose their activities on their own in their free time. In this essay, I will shed some light on both the views and give my opinion.
To begin with, organised group activities allow children to socialize with people in their immediate vicinity. Children learn to interact with the people in their society. To illustrate this, one can organise picnic among familieswhich will give enough room for children to socialize. Additionally, children learn various team building activities like working in a group competing with their peers, coping up with pressure etc. Furthermore, children learn the right attitude from being in a group.
On the other hand, children should be independent in choosing their activities in their free time. This gives the freedom of thought and children learn to take up challenges and responsibilities. However, there is a possibility that certain children take up wrong routes. Due to technological advancements, children are more prone to playing video games, socializing themselves on the internet. This will detach them from their immediate social circle. Children can be given freedom of thought, but adult supervision is necessary to ensure that they do not take wrong path.
In conclusion, having considered both the views, I think an organised group activity is more beneficial for children. Children are the future of society and their nurturing can not be ignored.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 37, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
There has been an increasing debate as to whether children should be encouraged to partic...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, so, as to, i think, in conclusion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 8.3376753507 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1321.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 247.0 315.596192385 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34817813765 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96437052324 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90000652814 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 176.041082164 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.558704453441 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 397.8 506.74238477 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.2874718311 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.0666666667 106.682146367 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4666666667 20.7667163134 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.26666666667 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.466053455776 0.244688304435 190% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.16864831759 0.084324248473 200% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0983534426728 0.0667982634062 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.307419400124 0.151304729494 203% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0601747689792 0.056905535591 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.45 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 78.4519038076 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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