Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organised group activities in their free time. Others say that this is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own.
Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
Some argue that the kids should be asked to involve in team activities in their free times while others say that it is crucial for kids to learn how to stay alone. This essay discusses both side of the views together with the opinions in the following paragraphs.
Firstly, it is important for the children to participate in team activities because this will help to improve their communication skill and team working ability. This is to say that they have a chance to build up these skill since they are communicating to play or work with different people to achieve a set goal during these activities. I, personally agrees that participating in group activities is necessary for the children as the achievable skills are valuable for later part of their career. For instance, a report from The Strait Time stated that children who participate in group activities at their age of 5 to 15 years old, have 80% higher chance to build a successful career.
On the other hand, some people state that children should gain an ability of staying alone when they are young. As a consequence, they might even not be able to well communicate with people and create a huge number of problems during the team working events. Personally, I disagree with this concept because this will affect the physical performance of the children. A good example is that the children who stay alone during their development stage, are more likely to get physical related diseases at their older ages according to the research from Harvard University.
To summarise, the communication skill, team working ability and the physical wellness can be achieved by allowing children to involve in team activities at their young age.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 214, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this skill' or 'these skills'?
Suggestion: this skill; these skills
...say that they have a chance to build up these skill since they are communicating to play or...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, so, well, while, for instance, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1420.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 287.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94773519164 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69885763052 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.543554006969 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 442.8 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 32.4190026919 49.4020404114 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.090909091 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0909090909 20.7667163134 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.18181818182 7.06120827912 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.363942559334 0.244688304435 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.141457002498 0.084324248473 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0693930576519 0.0667982634062 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.22083749662 0.151304729494 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0806248263583 0.056905535591 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 50.2224549098 107% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 78.4519038076 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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