Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organized group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how occupy themselves on their own. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
People have different views about the effectiveness of participating in social activities for children as opposed to entertaining themselves individually in their free time. While there are some benefits in being alone, I believe that being in social activities is usually more productive.
Sometimes children should be nurtured to enjoy from their free time by playing alone. This attitude would be helpful for their adulthood as they might be going to encounter living alone, far away from their families and friends. As a result, they could easily fulfill their leisure activity needs as if no one is there to hang out together. Additionally, when it comes to social communication, children who have learned to occupy themselves independently, will be less influenced by others and peers. In fact, they are aware about their necessities and requirements as well as enjoy their own time-consuming habits.
However, I would argue that being active and acquiring social skills could be more beneficial for children. Firstly, socially and emotionally, children will be able to interact and communicate better with their peers which is highly recommended to establish effective relationship when they would reach adulthood. Secondly, children with different competencies can strengthen their peers’ weaknesses. For example, introverted children would be able to develop their communication skills with people as they spend time with extroverted friends. Finally, there is no doubt that, teamwork always has played a vital role in every aspect of people life when they need to tackle their problems. Therefore, children will not acquire skills to participate in groups unless they start to be active in various social activities.
In conclusion, it seems to me that it would be better for children to involve in different social activities rather than spend time independently.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 234, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'recommended establishing'.
Suggestion: recommended establishing
...better with their peers which is highly recommended to establish effective relationship when they would ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, while, for example, in conclusion, in fact, no doubt, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1599.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 290.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.51379310345 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01735172212 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.568965517241 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 486.9 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.4426105008 49.4020404114 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.214285714 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7142857143 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.4285714286 7.06120827912 162% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.294334589843 0.244688304435 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125474686194 0.084324248473 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0618655498594 0.0667982634062 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196179475174 0.151304729494 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0663424232802 0.056905535591 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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