Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organized group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own.
Discuss both points and give your opinion?
It has been argued that parents should make children focus on team-oriented sports in their leisure time. However, others believe that spending time alone would teach them some vital skills. Although I am of the opinion that children being all by themselves is more valuable.
There are a number of reasons associated with leisure activities consisting of many participants. First of all, it teaches patience to children. Different players are of different opinions and it might conflict with the personal viewpoint of a child. This would teach children to absorb anger and show patience for contradictions. Secondly, group interaction improves the communication skills of a child. Team activities include a lot of interaction among players and by that children learn to not only understand others properly but to convey their ideas in a clear manner.
However, children involved in activities with no one but themselves have significant positive aspects. The most key benefit of it is building a strong personality. Playing alone leads to self-confidence that anything is possible without being dependant on anyone. It is often reported that introvert children have stronger personalities than children who are extrovert. In addition, being alone brings out creativity. Children in group activities are more likely to receive negative comments and face conflicts with others. This discourages children to think out of box and limits creativity but being the only one in activity will avoid these issues and leads to a creative approach.
In conclusion, While team focused sports would lead to skills such as patience and better communications, I believe that involvement in sole player activities brings far more benefits which include strong personality and creative thinking.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “Although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...one would teach them some vital skills. Although I am of the opinion that children being...
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Message: Consider replacing "in a clear manner" with adverb for "clear"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...hers properly but to convey their ideas in a clear manner. However, children involved in acti...
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Message: Did you mean 'dependent' on?
Suggestion: dependent
...that anything is possible without being dependant on anyone. It is often reported that in...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, while, in addition, in conclusion, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1513.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 275.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.50181818182 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98375546823 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.041082164 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.589090909091 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 459.0 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.3986785398 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.0 106.682146367 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1764705882 20.7667163134 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.05882352941 7.06120827912 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208987991859 0.244688304435 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0654718459023 0.084324248473 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0589506095298 0.0667982634062 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126285233274 0.151304729494 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0738208462191 0.056905535591 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.0946893788 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 50.2224549098 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.32 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.