Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organised group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Education is a fundamental principle of everyone's life. Nowadays, children's go through lots of endurance concerning to be competent enough in this modern era. Whereas, to get relief from their studying stress; during leisure time parents should motivate teenagers to take part in organised group activities or learn to occupy their minds on their own. The parallel views are portrayed in consequent paragraphs.
Many a time, children's tend to spend the majority of their time watching television programmes or online streaming platforms for entertainment. Instead, parents can encourage them to participate in team activities, socialising for the benefits of community. For example, joining charity groups or becoming a member of environment protection team; this will develop value-added skills, which will be fruitful in future. Additionally, adults can also integrate the children's to be a part of the sports team or playing group sports. Such activity will enhance the team playing skills, leadership qualities and many more, which can help to be a better team player in the corporate world.
On the other hand, some parents do not interfere in the child's free time; on the contrary, they believe adolescence should figure out on their own to occupy themselves. In this evident tech developed world, it is easy to learn new skills online, which can prove crucial when they face the world. To illustrate, online platforms like Youtube, Udemy and many others, which provide the online expert's lectures to improve your abilities. One can learn painting, a new language, computer coding, etc. to enhance their capabilities, improvising for an imminent competitive world.
In my opinion, both views are imperative in children's life; extroverts can take part in team activities as they are more interested in on-field activities. Alternatively, introverts can spend time in the home, entertaining themselves as per their likings. Moreover, ambiverts can be a part of both and keep themselves engaged as for choice opted.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 409, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...ue-added skills, which will be fruitful in future. Additionally, adults can also integrat...
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Line 5, column 449, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to paint'.
Suggestion: to paint
...o improve your abilities. One can learn painting, a new language, computer coding, etc. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, moreover, so, whereas, as for, for example, in my opinion, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1712.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 316.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.41772151899 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93518074603 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.598101265823 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 525.6 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.1248915315 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.705882353 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5882352941 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.05882352941 7.06120827912 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.339708999844 0.244688304435 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0975668446063 0.084324248473 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0961646840545 0.0667982634062 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.212238959793 0.151304729494 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.067651111269 0.056905535591 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.33 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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