Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organised group activities in their free time . Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own .
Discuss both these views and give your opinion .
It is believed by many people that parents ought to provide encouragement to their children to engage in group activities during their leisure time. Whereas others emphasise the importance of having children learning the art of keeping themselves busy. In my opinion, I consider that participation in team recreational activities has a beneficial effect on the social skills as well as the health of children.
On one hand, some people think it is necessary to push kids towards participation in recreational team activities and I agree with this view as it improves social and interpersonal skills. In other words, doing an activity along with other children enables them to interact with each other and fosters communication between children. For example, kids overcome shyness and hesitation of talking to their peers by indulging in classes like storytelling , extempore, group discussion classes, and group dance. Also, especially kids whose both parents are working and kids are often left with the caregivers, this is a great chance for them to make new friends. Furthermore, certain group activities help in keeping them healthy and mentally astute. For example, playing group sports like basketball, football and cricket has enormous benefits on their health and mental well-being.
On the other hand, kids engaging in activities on their own provides them a feeling of independence and being responsible which ultimately leads to development of critical life skills such as decision making. For example, At home, kids often choose between things to keep themselves busy like doing non-fire cooking, simple household chores or playing with their own toys, watching Tv or dancing. This fosters decision making in the young minds.
Moreover, it is the most cost effective way to keep kids occupied and content. In other words, It saves a lot of finances for some families who may not be able to afford to enroll their kids in expensive clubs conducting such activities.
In conclusion, while many people vary in their opinions, I think that kids participation in specialised group activities is the need of the hour as it oversomes isolation and keeps kids physically and mentally fit.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 150, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...p activities during their leisure time. Whereas others emphasise the importance of havi...
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Line 3, column 452, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...y indulging in classes like storytelling , extempore, group discussion classes, an...
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Line 3, column 531, Rule ID: WHOSE_DT[5]
Message: Did you mean 'who's'?
Suggestion: who's
... and group dance. Also, especially kids whose both parents are working and kids are o...
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Line 6, column 104, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...vides them a feeling of independence and being responsible which ultimately leads...
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Line 6, column 294, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ween things to keep themselves busy like doing non-fire cooking, simple household...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, well, whereas, while, for example, i think, in conclusion, such as, as well as, in my opinion, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1856.0 1615.20841683 115% => OK
No of words: 350.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30285714286 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86414777994 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554285714286 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 558.9 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.8037985163 49.4020404114 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.733333333 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3333333333 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.3333333333 7.06120827912 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.31287917621 0.244688304435 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106084806178 0.084324248473 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.07698162974 0.0667982634062 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178931541806 0.151304729494 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0873807588543 0.056905535591 154% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.84 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 150, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...p activities during their leisure time. Whereas others emphasise the importance of havi...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 452, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...y indulging in classes like storytelling , extempore, group discussion classes, an...
^^
Line 3, column 531, Rule ID: WHOSE_DT[5]
Message: Did you mean 'who's'?
Suggestion: who's
... and group dance. Also, especially kids whose both parents are working and kids are o...
^^^^^
Line 6, column 104, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...vides them a feeling of independence and being responsible which ultimately leads...
^^
Line 6, column 294, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ween things to keep themselves busy like doing non-fire cooking, simple household...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, well, whereas, while, for example, i think, in conclusion, such as, as well as, in my opinion, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1856.0 1615.20841683 115% => OK
No of words: 350.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30285714286 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86414777994 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554285714286 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 558.9 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.8037985163 49.4020404114 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.733333333 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3333333333 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.3333333333 7.06120827912 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.31287917621 0.244688304435 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106084806178 0.084324248473 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.07698162974 0.0667982634062 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178931541806 0.151304729494 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0873807588543 0.056905535591 154% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.84 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.