Some people say schools should be responsible to teach young adults to look after their health others think this is not responsibility of schools To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Some people say schools should be responsible to teach young adults to look after their health, others think this is not responsibility of schools. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Health is that imperative part of our lives without which everything in life is worthless. Children are quite inconsiderate about it and do not know the actual value of it. While a few people believe that their educational institute is responsible for creating awareness among them, others think in contrast. In my opinion, school is the most suitable place for it.
To begin with, two most indispensable reasons are school timings and availability of facilities at school. Pupils spend quite a huge part of their day there. Typical schooling hours, in India, are eight hours a day that starts from early morning. After school hours, children do not have substantial time to take care for their health; therefore, schools should take this responsibility and fulfill it. In addition, almost every educational institute possesses facilities, such as playgrounds, fitness center, and health experts. Students, together with their studies, ought to be motivated to avail it. As they are not often available easily, for that reason, school could be an apt place to indulge pupils in healthy activities.
However, some people think that instead of schools, parents should be responsible, which is a common fallacy. As parents spend almost entire day at work, they do not have sufficient time to teach anything to their child. According to the recent survey, conducted by BBC News, more than 80 per cent of parents only meet their children at night, whereas 10 per cent do not even get a chance to talk to them. The remaining 10% parents are those who might teach them, which is quite low percentage of people. Thus, relying on guardians would be a mistake.
In summary, I completely agree that acquisition of knowledge about health, and its practice among young adolescents can be better learned at schools. This is because of schooling hours and resources at schools, which make them an appropriate place for it. Parents, on the other hand, should not be responsible as they are extremely busy with their work.

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Average: 9.2 (2 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, therefore, thus, whereas, while, in addition, in contrast, in summary, such as, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1679.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 332.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05722891566 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69908258743 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.590361445783 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 499.5 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.2648860535 49.4020404114 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.3684210526 106.682146367 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4736842105 20.7667163134 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.57894736842 7.06120827912 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.297223836737 0.244688304435 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0833784652191 0.084324248473 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0682928142205 0.0667982634062 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178230942309 0.151304729494 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0379504022163 0.056905535591 67% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.0946893788 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.77 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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