Some people say schools should be responsible to teach young adults to look after their health, others think this is not responsibility of schools. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The question of whether schools should be accountable to educate youngsters about the importance of a healthy lifestyle or not remains a controversy. In my view, while these institutions are not the primary source for health-related advises, they still play a key role in raising the awareness of being healthy for their students.
On the one hand, it is understandable why some people argue that schools should not cover topics such as personal fitness lessons. These critics may claim that such institutions ought to focus on academic subjects such as science, history, and literature, putting beside personal health topics. When students go to school, they should devote all of their time to getting good grades at such academic areas. Meanwhile, parents or family members are the ones who responsible for the health status of their children. As these individuals live together with the students, they may provide better lessons about health for these youngsters.
On the other hand, I believe that schools should make sure that their students are knowledgeable in essential personal health topics. Firstly, those who go to school should not only be literate but also be healthy. Maintaining a good health is a vital element of being an excellent student. If the person is sick or cannot go to schools, the person will not sustain his or her academic performance. Secondly, for many years, educational institutions have integrated physical education to the overall curriculum via physical education classes. Compared to the total time of other classes, such physical training classes consume minimal time of young students. Finally, many parents are not quite ready or qualified to teach their children the vital benefits of being healthy. For example, those who smoke will have a difficult time sharing about the dangers of smoking.
In conclusion, it seems to me that schools are in charge of teaching children the benefits of a healthy lifestyle even though these institutions might not be the only source.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: Whether; The question whether
The question of whether schools should be accountable to educat...
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Line 2, column 458, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a responsible'.
Suggestion: who is a responsible
... parents or family members are the ones who responsible for the health status of their children...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1694.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 324.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22839506173 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77141245998 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549382716049 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 515.7 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.1161812818 49.4020404114 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.875 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.25 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.1875 7.06120827912 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197477771783 0.244688304435 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0681150785378 0.084324248473 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0442019169622 0.0667982634062 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113331027671 0.151304729494 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0289496586655 0.056905535591 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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