In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care.
Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family?
One of the most challenging problems of today’s society is the question who should be responsible ofr our old people. It’s not only a financial problem but also a question of the system we want our society to have. In my essay, I would like to four different models.
Firstly, the company can be responsible for their retired employees. For this reason a special fund could be established. The advantage of this model is that it should be the cheapest solution if everyone believe in the capitalist system. A possible problem is that the companies might have competition disadvantage due to higher staff costs.
A second solution is that the government has to take the responsibility for the old people’s care. It can finance this with its tax incomes. Actually, this is the most democratic model sinc everybody gets as much money as he or she needs. Unfortunately, as the present situation in our country shows, this solution seems not to work very well. The government can no longer afford supporting all the old people.
Another way of solving this problem is to give back the responsibility to the individual. This means that everybody has to save money during their working life for the time after their retirement. This seems to be not a very fair model because their will certainly exist people who can’t afford to save part of their salary. In this case the government would have to save for them.
A last solution is to go back to the old model of the big family who cares for all their members. I do not think this is possible in our days society because the family structures have so much changes.
To sum up, I have to admit that I cannot find a really good solution for this problem. All models have advantages and disadvantages. Certainly we have to think about this topic much more in the future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 91, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...;s society is the question who should be responsible ofr our old people. It'...
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Line 3, column 385, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to support'.
Suggestion: to support
...ll. The government can no longer afford supporting all the old people. Another way of ...
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Line 6, column 188, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...y because the family structures have so much changes. To sum up, I have to admit ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, if, really, second, so, well, as to, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 24.0651302605 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1523.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 320.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.759375 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7624558113 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.515625 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 477.9 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.2650885261 49.4020404114 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 72.5238095238 106.682146367 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2380952381 20.7667163134 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.95238095238 7.06120827912 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269752508523 0.244688304435 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0868041579406 0.084324248473 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0705290158776 0.0667982634062 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147855394887 0.151304729494 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0728990054321 0.056905535591 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 13.0946893788 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 50.2224549098 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.3001002004 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.74 12.4159519038 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.24 8.58950901804 84% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 78.4519038076 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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