Some people spend a lot of money on tickets to go to sporting or cultural events.Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Essay topics:

Some people spend a lot of money on tickets to go to sporting or cultural events.
Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

In this sedentary lifestyle, attending cultural and sporting events are sources of rejuvenation. A large amount of money is spent by some people to attend these events. In my opinion, this positive trend, energies the sportsmen spirits, help the people to socialize and boost their enthusiasm
for cultural sports.

Firstly, with the immense increase in industrialization life has become more hectic and stressful and in order to, energies the mind and body people invest their time and money in pursuing their interest. Also, people experience a substantial increase in energy levels while watching their
favourite sportsmen playing in live events. For instance, in the USA, people spend half of their income on buying tickets to attend events of their interest,
as this gives them satisfaction and contentment. The money spent on watching live concerts or attending sports events is worth, considering the beneficial impact it has on mind and body.

Secondly, by becoming part of these events people get the opportunity to socialize. In other words, people with similar interest can come together and this can further lead to the progressive development of society and individual. To exemplify, in the cultural events on poetry, the poets from different regions get together on one platform and the emerging newcomers get chance to socialize with them, which can further heighten their career
in poetry. Thus, to be part of these events and spending money on the tickets is quite minimal if compared with a bright future.

Finally, spending money to attend cultural events is worthwhile, as it builds a strong connection with customs and values. Furthermore, these events
are often organised by traditional groups representing traditions and connecting people to their basic roots. For example, the popular cultural event
'Region and Tradition' is organized every year by the government of Delhi to promote the harmony, prosperity and oneness among countrymen. Therefore,
in order to stay connected with cultural believes, attending these events is quite necessary.

In conclusion, although a lot of money has been spent by people on buying tickets of various events, considering the numerous advantages, this
has become a positive development. Nevertheless, it is a good trend and people should realize that attending such events rejoices their brain,
enhance social links and develop values for tradition.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 41.998997996 143% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2061.0 1615.20841683 128% => OK
No of words: 376.0 315.596192385 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.48138297872 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82914601398 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 176.041082164 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529255319149 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 628.2 506.74238477 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 14.0 4.76152304609 294% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.9470237425 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.235294118 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1176470588 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5294117647 7.06120827912 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 14.0 4.38176352705 320% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250056539682 0.244688304435 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.092483018234 0.084324248473 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0613739157085 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0948600682555 0.151304729494 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0668292032162 0.056905535591 117% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.5 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.26 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 78.4519038076 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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