Some people spend a lot of money on tickets to go to sporting or cultural events.
Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
In this sedentary lifestyle attending, cultural and sporting events are sources of rejuvenation. A large amount of money is spent by some people to attend these events. In my opinion, this positive trend, energies the sportsmen spirits, help the people to socialize and boost their enthusiasm
for cultural sports.
Firstly, with the immense increase in industrialization life has become more hectic and stressful and in order to, energies the mind and body people invest their time and money in pursuing their interest. Also, people experience a substantial increase in energy levels while watching their favourite sportsmen playing in live events. For instance, in the USA, people spend half of their income on buying tickets to attend events of their interest, as this gives them satisfaction and contentment. The money spent on watching live concerts or attending sports events is worth, considering the
the beneficial impact it has on mind and body.
Secondly, these events provide the opportunity to socialize. In other words, people with similar interest can come together and this can further lead to the progressive development of society and individual. To exemplify, in the cultural events on poetry, the poets from different regions get together on one platform and the emerging newcomers get chance to socialize with them, which can further heighten their career in poetry. Thus, to be part of these events and spending money on the tickets is quite minimal if compared with a bright future.
Finally, spending money to attend cultural events is worthwhile, as it builds a strong connection with customs and values. Furthermore, these events are often organised by traditional groups representing traditions and connecting people to their basic roots. For example, the popular cultural event 'Region and Tradition' is organized every year by the government of Delhi to promote the harmony, prosperity and oneness among countrymen. Therefore, to stay connected with cultural beliefs, attending these events is quite necessary.
In conclusion, although a lot of money has been spent by people on buying tickets of various events, considering the numerous advantages this has become a positive development. Nevertheless, it is a good trend and it will not only rejoices the brain but also enhance the social links of people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 7.30460921844 14% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 41.998997996 138% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1981.0 1615.20841683 123% => OK
No of words: 367.0 315.596192385 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.39782016349 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83455764005 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 176.041082164 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542234332425 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 610.2 506.74238477 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.76152304609 252% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.3517973702 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.529411765 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5882352941 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.8235294118 7.06120827912 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.38176352705 160% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251551339455 0.244688304435 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0865634590826 0.084324248473 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0672141746427 0.0667982634062 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121472348601 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0774416480495 0.056905535591 136% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.0946893788 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.04 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.28 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 78.4519038076 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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