Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere To what extent do you agree with this view | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere.
To what extent do you agree with this view?

There is no doubt that art is important but it is debatable whether it should be sponsored by the government. Some people insist that the government is wasting money on arts. In their opinion, it is important to spend this money on more useful things. I agree with this view.

For one thing, arts promotions and events can be organized by many other private organizations or society clubs and you do not really need a government intervention to run the show. There are many clubs such as Lion’s club or YMCC clubs that can take the initiative and sponsor such events. For example, a music program or an exhibition of paintings can be organized by a local club and there is no need for the government to sponsor it. There are also many rich people who take pleasure in sponsoring art shows and programmes.

When the government does not have to spend money on arts it can focus on developing core areas like education, healthcare and infrastructure. Poverty, illiteracy and malnutrition are still a major problem in many countries around the world. For example, in India, millions of students still do not go to school. Likewise, there are numerous homeless people. Therefore, instead of spending the public funds on arts, the government should try to improve the health of its people. It should ensure that all children are going to school and they have access to good food and potable water.

In conclusion, while arts events and programmes are important for the society, they should not be sponsored by the tax money contributed by people. The government should focus on more important areas and use its money for the benefit and upliftment of the human society.

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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS General Training

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Essay evaluations by e-grader

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, likewise, really, so, still, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion, no doubt, such as, for one thing

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1391.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 286.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86363636364 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69756321123 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.524475524476 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 430.2 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.8080845275 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.9375 106.682146367 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.875 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.625 7.06120827912 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240731958727 0.244688304435 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0930990450351 0.084324248473 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104325537038 0.0667982634062 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168141204244 0.151304729494 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.129646342577 0.056905535591 228% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 13.0946893788 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.61 12.4159519038 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 8.58950901804 88% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 78.4519038076 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Essay evaluations by e-grader

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, likewise, really, so, still, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion, no doubt, such as, for one thing

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments