Some people think that having a set retirement age (e.g. 65 years) for everybody, regardless of occupation, is unfair. They believe that certain workers deserve to retire and receive a pension at an earlier age.
Do you agree or disagree?
Which types of workers do you think should benefit from early retirement?
Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
It is believed that applying the same retirement age of 65 to all workers in every occupation is not fair and those who work in certain jobs deserve to have an earlier retirement and pension. this essay totally agrees with this idea because of the differences in working conditions between occupations. this essay believes that early retirement will favor people who work in unhealthy conditions.
working in different conditions means that workers spend an uneven amount of energy and health to their jobs. this is to say that many white-collar workers spend most of their time in their office with great air conditioning while blue-collar workers have to suffer the burn from direct sunlight exposure. if these blue-collar workers are not allowed to retire earlier, they will be sure to have a shorter life expectancy, which is completely unfair. For example, a study indicates that the average age of most Vietnamese manual labors is 70 while most office workers live over 80.
if the government approves early retirement, people who work in harsh and extreme conditions will be benefitted. this is because these people are too exposed to sources of diseases, they need to be separated from their workplaces as early as possible. When workers are allowed to return to a healthier place, they will also less likely to face any severe health conditions leading to a longer life span. For instance, surveys show that miners in Binh Duong province choose to retire at 50 and most of them live over 75.
In conclusion, certain occupations require early retirement because people's working conditions are not the same and professionals in manual works will take full benefits from this approach.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1422.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 279.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09677419355 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67618834247 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.548387096774 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 445.5 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.8455437736 49.4020404114 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.5 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.25 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.08333333333 7.06120827912 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276808896588 0.244688304435 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106958055748 0.084324248473 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0918986265472 0.0667982634062 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17259052895 0.151304729494 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0780513421564 0.056905535591 137% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.