some people think that money is the best gift for teenagers others disagree Discuss both these views and give your opinion

Essay topics:

some people think that money is the best gift for teenagers, others disagree. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

In our modern society, it is becoming popular that elders give gifts to teenagers during some occasions such as birthday, Christmas day and new year, etc. Some people think that money is the best gift for teenagers while others have opposite opinion. I personally believe that there are several substitutes for teenagers as presents.

On the one hand, adults are now leading a fast-paced lifestyle. Some of them have nearly no time to choose gifts for teenagers. Also it is difficult for them to know whether what they choose is suitable for teenagers or not. Therefore, money becomes their best choice as a present. Secondly, they believe that giving money to youngsters can give the youngsters freedom so that they can buy whatever they wish to have. This can satisfy the teenagers ultimately and make them really happy. Thirdly, some parents believe that teenagers need to know about money as early as possible. This can cultivate their capability of financing and investing while teenagers save money. Parents can teach them how to allocate the money and use money properly so that them can learn to manage their budget and save for the future.

On the other hand, others think there are several options as gifts other than money. For example, an educational book as a gift is a way to remind teenagers to respect knowledge. Travelling together is a meaningful gift that youngsters can have accompany and gain valuable memories. These kind of gifts are far more special than only giving money to them. Secondly, it is also believed that choosing gifts together with kids is a good way to enhance the family relationship. Thirdly, if kids know about money too early, it is believed that this may lead them to be money-oriented. All we know that there are a lot of things that can not be measured by money. It is unfair for kids to be loved only through offering money.

In conclusion, gifts should be diversified so that teenagers may have acknowledgement that money is not the only way to express love of adults. And youngsters need to be guided how to use money properly while they receive money as a gift so that they can develop good spending habits.

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Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Also,
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Suggestion: accompanied
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Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'These kinds'?
Suggestion: This kind; These kinds
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, while, for example, in conclusion, kind of, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 43.0 24.0651302605 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1797.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 372.0 315.596192385 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83064516129 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57211150653 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.47311827957 0.561755894193 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 563.4 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0721442886 137% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.1944535092 49.4020404114 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 81.6818181818 106.682146367 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9090909091 20.7667163134 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.45454545455 7.06120827912 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 8.67935871743 184% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.330879851195 0.244688304435 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112847250593 0.084324248473 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10117908758 0.0667982634062 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.234172279262 0.151304729494 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100227584164 0.056905535591 176% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 13.0946893788 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 12.4159519038 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.53 8.58950901804 88% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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