Some people believe that technology has made man more social and others think that less social. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In modern society, although some people think it become much easier for us to socialize through high-tech products such as mobile phones, computer with wifi equipment. Others believe that all these technology development leads to less socialization between human beings. I personally think each coin has two sides. only by using technology in an accurate way, can we human people get a balance life.

On the one hand, technology has improved our social efficiency. The development of advanced communication tools such as facebook, WeChat etc, have given us more opportunity to get connected with strangers and relatives who live far away. In this aspect, it become much easier to socialize on internet comparing with off-line methods.

On the other hand, as people can talk on line, they communicate less through face to face. People prefer to text rather than talk. What is more, high-tech apps and games are so attractive so that youngsters can sit all the time instead of hanging out. Besides, it is said that modern people have an obesity and sedentory life because of the appearance of 3D virtual glasses, and teenagers are more willing to communicate with a robot instead of having a real communication with their classmates or parents.

In conclusion, I personally believe that people are more socialized and connected thanks to the development of technology. As the high-tech development is unavoidable, what we can do is to use it correctly instead of being kidnapped or constrained in the aspect of socialization. While at the same time, teenagers needs to be guided to be socialize with new technology from being misled.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, if, so, while, in conclusion, such as, what is more, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1378.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 267.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16104868914 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04229324003 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91725440601 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.595505617978 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 439.2 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.3866280922 49.4020404114 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.4285714286 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0714285714 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.64285714286 7.06120827912 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240932154647 0.244688304435 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0896114450367 0.084324248473 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0706191923835 0.0667982634062 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148672238992 0.151304729494 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0620737737162 0.056905535591 109% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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