Some people think that the most important thing about being rich is it gives a person the opportunity to help other people. Do you agree or disagree?

Essay topics:

Some people think that the most important thing about being rich is it gives a person the opportunity to help other people. Do you agree or disagree?

Opinions are divided as to whether or not affluent people should provide their money to people from less advantaged backgrounds. While some assert that it is best for the rich to use money for their own needs, I believe showing compassion for unprivileged individual should be prioritized by wealthy ones.

On the one hand, there are some justifications why rich people should disregard the help for others as their top concern. First, when possessing a colossal amount of money, these people should satisfy their demands prior to assisting others. In particular, people from affluent backgrounds have been endeavoring through nerve-racking and strenuous time to earn such a lucrative income so it is time for them to reward themselves and unwind by lavishing their money. Second, money earned by the wealthy should be reserved for future predicaments. For example, were it not for his huge monetary assets, Bé Heo a Vietnamese millionaire could not receive state-of-the-art American medical treatment to colon cancer, an incurable disease in VN at the time, and become a healthy person later in life.

On the other hand, I hold belief that helping the majority of citizens is of pivotal importance because these rich can express their altruism and bridge the disparity between social statuses. To begin with, sharing life burdens of destitute individuals plays a crucial role in alleviating both their mental and physical pain. For instance, via charitable campaigns raised for people suffering from natural disaster in Japan ,Oprah Winfrey, a philanthropist not only assuages the sorrow from losing homes and family but also provides them with food. Furthermore, by diverting money to impoverished individuals, the wealthy are maintaining the balance in the society. To be more specific, when well-off people allocate money for their tuition fee of children from poverty-stricken areas, these kids can have a chance to gain access to education and broaden their knowledge like their wealthy peers.

In conclusion, although the opportunity to help others is not the most important things that wealthy ones should do, I believe that the benevolent actions should be given the highest priority.

Votes
Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; whether or not; as to whether
Opinions are divided as to whether or not affluent people should provide their mo...
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Line 5, column 425, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...suffering from natural disaster in Japan ,Oprah Winfrey, a philanthropist not only...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, second, so, well, while, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in particular, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1859.0 1615.20841683 115% => OK
No of words: 347.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35734870317 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88348656381 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 176.041082164 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.622478386167 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 569.7 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.3105202855 49.4020404114 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.0 106.682146367 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6923076923 20.7667163134 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.0 7.06120827912 170% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.159477188148 0.244688304435 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0644250194975 0.084324248473 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0701670750567 0.0667982634062 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126141021969 0.151304729494 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0695655521793 0.056905535591 122% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.16 8.58950901804 118% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 78.4519038076 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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