Some people think that not all criminals should be kept in prison. Some criminals should do unpaid work to help other people in the community. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Nowadays, the number of crimes all over the world is on the increase and most sociologists regard this a result of unemployment, poverty and lack of education. While a group of people argue that offenders should be punished by going to jails, I believe that doing unsalaried work in the community would be more beneficial for the people, prisons and the criminals.
There are a variety of reasons why I would argue that doing unpaid work in the local community would be a positive scheme. Firstly, governments would not suffer from the expeditions that prisoners and prisons bring about. Secondly, rehabilitation programs help offenders to learn some vocational training that are useful in their future life. Finally, other offenders who are at prisons may have an adverse effect on them which will encourage offenders to commit more crimes. Furthermore, jail punishment is not a deterring act against crime and it would not diminish the violence and criminal acts in society. A salient example of this is USA that could decrease the crime statistics up to 30% by educating criminals
and teaching them vocational training which lead to better job opportunities for the criminals. Although they had criminal records which makes finding a job more difficult, they could obtain a satisfactory job.
On the other hand, most of the criminals re offend after releasing from prison into society and they usually break the law in order to making a living since they have no experience at works. Furthermore, rehabilitation programs would benefit the society and criminals. They can do some community work in their neighborhood such as talking to schools or cleaning the streets. As a result, the students who dropped out of schools or those who are under peer pressure would be less likely to become delinquent. TO support my claim, I can refer to an article having been published in Times magazine, indicates that rehabilitation programs make awareness among juveniles, parents and the offenders and this programs could stop the
fast raise in criminal records.
In conclusion, although prisons play a central role in punishment and are appropriate places for those who committed sever crimes such as killing, the role of community services in training offenders should not be neglected. I assert that all humans have the ability to turn into good, positive people who are beneficial for their society and family.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, so, while, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2026.0 1615.20841683 125% => OK
No of words: 393.0 315.596192385 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15521628499 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80940230178 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534351145038 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 630.9 506.74238477 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.5746445561 49.4020404114 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.625 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5625 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.125 7.06120827912 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.9879759519 301% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223582996162 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0678782343684 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0481673041307 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112811366542 0.151304729494 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.053803634155 0.056905535591 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 78.4519038076 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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