Some people think that school should reward students who show the best academic results, while others believe that it is more important to reward students who show improvements. Discuss both views
It is arguably, who are all doing continues improvements should be rewarded. Whereas many people are agreeing achievable candidates need to focus particularly. I am not refusing those who are all achievable but my general opinion needs to show the hard working people by continues improvers.
First up all, those who are all getting high achievements that people are getting recognized by everyone. They can showcase widely. Secondly, these people are getting motivated day by day by everyone in order to their hard work. For instance, Cambridge University and Oxford University are publishing their results on every year in order to motivate their achievers and try to focus and improve other achievers as well due to this every year successive growth increasing a lot.
Nevertheless, those who started from the bottom ranks but slowly getting improvements that people not getting recognized by many people except their parents. If we stimulate them then they can attain anything in the world. Mainly, some people are coming from the very poor background those who are not getting a chance to consummate themselves due to financial problems. We need to tune them to focus their life to gradually increase it. For instance, In Africa, many people are under below poverty but every Olympics we can see a plethora of athletes participating and won the medals as well because of they recognized by the Government and highly motivated them without just focus only achievers.
To recapitulate this, many of the success people are getting influenced by all but those who are all eager to achieve and try to improve day by day, we can tune them more to get success in their life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: day by
...dly, these people are getting motivated day by day by everyone in order to their hard work. ...
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...ed by many people except their parents. If we stimulate them then they can attain ...
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Suggestion: because they
...articipating and won the medals as well because of they recognized by the Government and highly...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, then, well, whereas, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1406.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 278.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05755395683 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73136960105 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 176.041082164 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.525179856115 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 455.4 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.6901001518 49.4020404114 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.153846154 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3846153846 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.53846153846 7.06120827912 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.111558823274 0.244688304435 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.047430726519 0.084324248473 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0413238170317 0.0667982634062 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0807570260549 0.151304729494 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0322392905077 0.056905535591 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 78.4519038076 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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