Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encourage. others believe that children who are taught to cooperate rather than compete become more useful adults.discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Essay topics:

Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encourage. others believe that children who are taught to cooperate rather than compete become more useful adults.
discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

It is considered that to develop a sense of competition in children should be appreciated. While others are of the view that instead of this children should be taught cooperation in every area of learning which will lead them to be an individual benefiting the society. I believe that cooperative children are the ones who will always work for well being of people as an adult, so kids must have a sense of cooperation rather than competition.

On the one hand, competition makes students more passionate to achieve their goals. They try more and more to get the highest position in any area of learning either its studies, sports or any other contest. For example, when I was in school there was always a tough competition among the top graders of the class, they worked too hard to maintain their position in the class. Therefore, it was a sense of competition that never let them go beyond their expected grades. However, I believe that too much competition among the peers make them arrogant and there can be increased envy among them, which can make them evil-minded, and this will definitely bring up an individual harmful to others.

On the other hand, a sense of cooperation and coordination with other children stops them comparing with others and makes them friendly in nature. Lack of competition reduces the fear of losing or failure and the child never gives up in spite of failing, he tries his best to overcome all the hurdles in the way of his success. For instance, once in a class test, I got low marks, but due to no competition among my peers, I did not feel degraded and thus tried to work hard again. I did not give up and as a result, I got good marks in the next test. I believe that sense of co-operation always nurtures a sensible, a mature and a responsible adult.

In conclusion, children should learn to cooperate rather than compete with their peers as cooperation leads to an adult who is humble in nature, have more sense of responsibility and a member who is very much helpful to the society.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, in spite of, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1675.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 360.0 315.596192385 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65277777778 5.12529762239 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67958531664 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508333333333 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 525.6 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 50.2532870282 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.642857143 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7142857143 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.5 7.06120827912 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.290372989083 0.244688304435 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104781957109 0.084324248473 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0870312906452 0.0667982634062 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.201423655773 0.151304729494 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102569527517 0.056905535591 180% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.99 12.4159519038 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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