Some people think that team sports prepare children for work.
Discuss both sides and state your opinion?
According to some, group sports make children ready for the future work environment. Although there are few circumstances where teamwork will not benefit as for freelancers and for those who had a bad experience while working with a team, I am of the opinion that there are significant positive aspects of group sport such as learning to face conflict and adjusting with teams.
Admittedly, there are some situation in which team sport will not be beneficial for a future career. First of all, being a freelancer. These are people who work alone from there home and their interaction with people for work is very limited. Therefore, the skill of teamwork will rarely be used by freelancers so it does not matter if they were a part of group sport or individual sport as a child. Secondly, sometimes children suffer from a bad experience related with teammates which make them dislike group activities. It can be a brutal fight between team players or a time when they got bullied from someone in their team. For example, children receiving harsh comments from their teammates are more likely to play individual games and even avoid to be in a team as an employee in future
However, there are major benefits for children playing sports with a team. Firstly, children will learn to interact with everyone in a team. They will be dealing with all kind of children in the team and will learn how to communicate properly and to use group strength to achieve their mutual goal. For instance. employees who were good at group sports in childhood are more likely to be a top performer in a professional work team as well. Another equally important advantage is that children will learn to deal with conflicts. Every person has its own point of view and way of thinking which results in conflicts among team players. Children learn how to positively accept others opinion and to convince them for their own idea. This proves to be an essential skill required for an employee to work in a team.
In conclusion, While there are rare circumstances where children team skills acquired by group sports are not required as for a self-employed who is working alone and for someone reluctant on joining a team, I believe children involved in team sports will help in future work as they will be more understanding regarding different opinions and effective communication.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Employees
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, as for, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 13.1623246493 175% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1963.0 1615.20841683 122% => OK
No of words: 402.0 315.596192385 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88308457711 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6952790845 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482587064677 0.561755894193 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 598.5 506.74238477 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 86.4747162077 49.4020404114 175% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.470588235 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6470588235 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.76470588235 7.06120827912 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.307842892749 0.244688304435 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115421244126 0.084324248473 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0693033522792 0.0667982634062 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23149302058 0.151304729494 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0224129945789 0.056905535591 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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