Some people think women should be allowed to join the army, the navy and the air force just like men.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many girls dream to be a part of a military organization when they grow up. They may like the camouflage uniform, the weapons, or to express their love to their country, or whatever reason they have. In my opinion, I see no reason to prevent them from joining the force.

On the individual aspect, women is capable to work in military, like any other jobs such as a banker, an engineer, or even a labor. There are many positions in military that do not need physical strength can be operated by women, for example, a speaker, a software engineer, or a chef. Nonetheless, if some women pass the same physical examination that needs to be done for some roles, they must be allowed to take the job.

On the military organization aspect, accepting women into the military would improve the organization in many ways. Firstly, it would increase the chance to find better personnel as there are 50% of female in the world, which doubles the prospect to get a good match. More than that, a military organization is one of the government organization, it should not promote sex discrimination which is against the laws defined in many developed country.

In summary, women should be allowed to join the military if they have an ability to do so, on the other hand, the military also benefits from accepting them. This is a win-win situation and there is nothing unpleasant here. In addition, alternate genders which is known as LGBT should also be treated without discrimination for the same reason.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, may, nonetheless, so, for example, in addition, in summary, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1242.0 1615.20841683 77% => OK
No of words: 259.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79536679537 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01166760082 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74437807844 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.571428571429 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 405.0 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.2360098321 49.4020404114 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.5 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5833333333 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5833333333 7.06120827912 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.155193514453 0.244688304435 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0553258938032 0.084324248473 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0511386585936 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0932770393507 0.151304729494 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0556237872254 0.056905535591 98% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 12.4159519038 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 78.4519038076 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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