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Some people thinks that government should increase tax on unhealthy food to encourage people to start eating healthy. Do you agree or disagree

It has been seen that now people are giving more preference to junk food rather than healthy food. To control this malaise, some natives are of opinion that government should come forward and laid high tax on unhealthy food so that people start giving priority to healthy food. I think this way will bring benefits but also feel there are other suggestions through which healthy food can be promoted.

To begin with, when government levy high tax on the junk food. People hesitate to buy these food in large quantity as it might upset their budget. Hence, people will be pursue towards healthy food. Furthermore, the main reason behind the shifting of people towards fast food is its availability. These food are easily approachable to them like near to their house, online order etc. If government implement this law, then there will be chance that small fast food outlets may not be able to pay tax to the government. Therefore they opted for those business where they pay less tax.

Moreover, I think there are other viable ways through which people can be motivated for healthy food. First among of them is awareness.. Government or health organisation can bring awareness among people especially children and youngsters through seminars , advertisements, camps and so on. Which provide information regarding the importance of healthy food in their life. Besides this, large companies should provide a platform to the people at national level who promotes healthy food like cooking reality shows, cookery shows etc. Thus, these types of methods can also play a vital role in encouraging citizens for adopting healthy habits.

In conclusion, it has become very necessary to involve people in healthy food items so government, individuals and society as a whole should come forward to change the fast food world into healthy world.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...n large quantity as it might upset their budget. Hence, people will be pursue tow...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, furthermore, hence, if, may, moreover, regarding, so, then, therefore, thus, i think, in conclusion, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1542.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 302.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1059602649 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52541029848 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.582781456954 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 463.5 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.0671164232 49.4020404114 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.7058823529 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7647058824 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.29411764706 7.06120827912 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.359745376749 0.244688304435 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120063232137 0.084324248473 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0787457904498 0.0667982634062 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.234406584916 0.151304729494 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0589520291045 0.056905535591 104% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.0946893788 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.06 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, furthermore, hence, if, may, moreover, regarding, so, then, therefore, thus, i think, in conclusion, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments