Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later. Some people think that having these people to give a talk to school students is the best way to tell them about dangers of committing a crime. Do you agree or disagree?
It has been argued that it is beneficial to let prisoners who have changed their lives for the better after serving their sentences relate their stories to young adults in order to keep them away from criminal activities. In my opinion, although these fellows can set a good example for adolescents, the encounter may have some unintentional negative effects on the students. Therefore, this kind of programs must be conducted under strict supervision.
On the one hand, listening to individuals who had turned their lives around is always educational for teenagers. The first lesson that they can learn from those former delinquents is that every action has its own consequences and no one can forever run from the responsibility of damages caused by their behaviors. Hence, one should ponder on the possible results of their thoughts before acting on them. Secondly, previous prisoners who have become successful citizens are the living examples of hope and determination. In other words, they prove that second chances do exists and one should not lose his/her ambition no matter how miserable his/her life might seem at the moment.
On the other hand, concerned parents believe that exposing their offspring to get in contact with such individuals with a violent background may have various detrimental impact on the students' innocent minds. Children are most of the time oblivious to what is going on in a gang of criminals since all their lives they have been kept away from that information by their guardians. Thus such encounters can open their eyes to a different lifestyle and ignite their curiosity to explore while they are not old enough to comprehend the threats of approaching that side of the world. Even if the lectures informs them about the possible threats they might not be able to understand it while being blinded by the enthusiasm of that way of living.
In conclusion, although having a former criminal give lectures at school might be an eye-opening experience for the juvenile audience, no one can guarantee that what part of the speech attracts most of the students’ attention and how it affects them. Therefore, these type of talks must be fully planned and practiced before being given in the public.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, in conclusion, kind of, in my opinion, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 24.0651302605 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1883.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 369.0 315.596192385 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10298102981 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73039500461 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579945799458 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 570.6 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.3337016322 49.4020404114 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.5 106.682146367 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3571428571 20.7667163134 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0714285714 7.06120827912 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.142104293532 0.244688304435 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0510737919761 0.084324248473 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0465042558274 0.0667982634062 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0906934670684 0.151304729494 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0256307504811 0.056905535591 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 50.2224549098 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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