Sport is one of the most popular draws on television today. Some people argue that the practice of showing sport on television is to blame for the poor health of the young generation by encouraging them to watch rather than take part in physical activity.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?
People are inclined towards watching Sports Channels on Television these days. Miserable health conditions of some children are blamed on aired sports channels on Television which only motivates them to watch those sports activities, in comparison to pursue the same competitive game in their real life. I support the given notion to some extent, however; it is the personality of those children to be blamed as well which is also responsible for their screen-glued nature.
To embark on, the increasing eminence of sports channels such as ESPN, Star World etcetera among the young generation lead them to watch for a longer duration of time. They spend much of their schedule’s time viewing those sports shows and fail to realise their terrible health conditions; dull and lazy.. Moreover, they do not indulge in eating healthy food as they prefer to restrict themselves from cooking while watching those sports shows and even ordering unhealthy food online which in return deteriorate their health as well. Resultantly, the airing of such sports shows is undoubtedly to be taken into consideration for the ill health of the youth.
Nevertheless, only tv channels can not be solely blamed for such indulgence of young people as the implying personality of an individual should be taken into account at the same time. This is because there are some people in youth who realise the importance of their health and therefore get involved in participating in sports activities by themselves. They do not acquire any advice from anyone to restrict their time while watching those sports channels, they refrain from it themselves, but there are others who do not care about it. Consequently, it is the individual’s personality traits which differentiate them in choosing to be glued to the Television screens or not.
To conclude, although the declining health conditions of the young generation is held responsible due to watching sports channels for excessive hours, it is the demeanor of some people which should be kept in mind as well as it guides them what to prefer and avoid for their own betterment.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, therefore, well, while, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1778.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 344.0 315.596192385 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16860465116 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82500711936 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502906976744 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 533.7 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.6061757042 49.4020404114 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.166666667 106.682146367 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.6666666667 20.7667163134 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.08333333333 7.06120827912 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.290060865997 0.244688304435 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125762200241 0.084324248473 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0594055288249 0.0667982634062 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200659740293 0.151304729494 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0306462307622 0.056905535591 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 13.0946893788 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.3 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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