Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair

Essay topics:

Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair

Many great sport players live as rich people, which is actually their job do not worth enough for human life. This brings up an issue that it does not fair if it compares to another professions that are more needed for people living. However, it becomes no problem and will be stay as an issue for some people and me.

Basically all people deserve a good living no matter what job they are doing. Somehow since early age, entertainment always stayed in a high class. For all people know, sport today is not only about being healthy or exercise, but also about performance and business. This pushes some athletes to the top society life, showing on television as models of shoe, healthy water brand or energizing pill. Those big companies pay athletes as an actor or an actress.

As an old story, everything that comes into popularity will be an idol and rich, and it is normal. another view of the issue comes from an inequality social-economy, the lower income brings a jealousy for some people. Thus, I think there is must be an equality life for all people so that people will not do protest of this life pattern in entertainment life. People will feel better if they feel equal.

Overall, I absolutely believe that everything that shows up in media will have attention and take money from big company, and it is usually happen. Thus, we must understand this, but to deal with this, there must be an equality for all people and living right.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 226, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ot only about being healthy or exercise, but also about performance and business....
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Suggestion: Another
... be an idol and rich, and it is normal. another view of the issue comes from an inequal...
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Line 7, column 141, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'happened'.
Suggestion: happened
...ney from big company, and it is usually happen. Thus, we must understand this, but to ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, if, so, thus, i think

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 41.998997996 45% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1205.0 1615.20841683 75% => OK
No of words: 257.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68871595331 5.12529762239 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00390054096 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40386321222 2.80592935109 86% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.587548638132 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 378.9 506.74238477 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 4.76152304609 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.4055076912 49.4020404114 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.0714285714 106.682146367 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3571428571 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.64285714286 7.06120827912 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.155694259546 0.244688304435 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0557522732474 0.084324248473 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0429270171604 0.0667982634062 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103414721666 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0149563399182 0.056905535591 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 13.0946893788 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 12.4159519038 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.48 8.58950901804 87% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 78.4519038076 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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