Violence in the media promote violence in society. To what extent do you agree?

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Violence in the media promote violence in society. To what extent do you agree?

Violence has existed in our society for a long time, however, media is impacting the ways we act and unfortunately one of these factors is a physical attack. This essay will agree with the statement and discuss the problems media is sharing.

Nowadays adolescents spend significant time watching television programs and playing video games that include violence. This has become an increasingly big problem from the early age and parents are usually too busy to pay attention or they do not think about the consequences. In fact, spending hours on aggressive computer games will affect our mental health subconsciously. For example,  a recent neurological evaluation of youth brain function reported an association between violent media exposure and decreased brain activation in response to increasingly violent images and scenes. 

Television programmes that include physical attack provoke the inside irritation and resentment. Being an active participant by watching the violence from media can effect our mindset and way of thinking a lot of more that we could understand. For example, television show called ‘’Krimi’’ in Estonia includes several crimes that have been committed mostly by the younger people in the city. There are several cases such as pocket theft, vandalism, drugs and even murders. This show role-models bad behaviours, however, some teenager might encourage their mind by seeing these actions because they want to be in television too.

In conclusion, aggressive and negative actions such as vandalism and physical attack can reflect bad behaviour in youngsters through television show or video games.

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Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, for example, in conclusion, in fact, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 41.998997996 62% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1419.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 250.0 315.596192385 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.676 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97635364384 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.28688302195 2.80592935109 117% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.664 0.561755894193 118% => OK
syllable_count: 434.7 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.7057934239 49.4020404114 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.0 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7272727273 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.54545454545 7.06120827912 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0944665974552 0.244688304435 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0355441771752 0.084324248473 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0476801074724 0.0667982634062 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0601266520589 0.151304729494 40% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0596880753906 0.056905535591 105% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.96 12.4159519038 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.16 8.58950901804 118% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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