As well as making money, businesses also have social responsibilities. To what extend do you agree or disagree?
Money making has always been the main focus to the businessman, however, in addition to making profit by doing business, they also have social duties to perform. I completely agree with the idea that, businesses should do more for the betterment of the society.
It needs a huge amount of investment to open a business and requires a lot of money as overhead cost during operation. This is because, during the startup, it requires to build infrastructure, buy machinery, so, to recover that money and overhead cost which includes wages of the employee, depreciation cost of the machinery, electricity cost, cost of raw material, the owner of the businesses need to make profit. Above discussion illustrates why a business should make profit during its operation.
On the other hand, making money should always not be the only aim of any business. There is a term in business community which is “social corporate responsibility”. According to this organizations that make money through business can do a lot to make a better society. For instance, they can create new job openings for the educated jobless youth and elderly people. So that, the youth would get chances to keep them busy in productive way, and elderly people could earn some money as well. Additionally, owners could adopt environment friendly technology which uses renewable energy, which in long term would reduce pollutions such as air pollution, water pollution by creating a better world to live.
In conclusion, we can summarize that, making money is important for the owner, but, contributing in making a better livable society is far more significant.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'focus'.
Suggestion: focus
Money making has always been the main focus to the businessman, however, in additio...
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Line 3, column 169, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'building'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: building
...ecause, during the startup, it requires to build infrastructure, buy machinery, so, to r...
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Line 5, column 179, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...corporate responsibility”. According to this organizations that make money through b...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, well, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1376.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 266.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17293233083 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03850299372 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93706962379 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.59022556391 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 434.7 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.9624201182 49.4020404114 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.666666667 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1666666667 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5 7.06120827912 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.279319423355 0.244688304435 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109910235726 0.084324248473 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0753122088001 0.0667982634062 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172228199544 0.151304729494 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0824807625306 0.056905535591 145% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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