It is claimed that these days young individuals are pursuing fashion and mode by dedicating a significant deal of money and time on clothes or technology. From my perspective, this trend is tracking by young people, and comprehensive awareness and consciousness due to fashion addictiveness can be beneficial.
No doubt, we live in a world that new luxury brands on clothes and goods, and technology gadgets are continuously introducing to the world. Maybe this trend is not merely their faults. If you look at TV programs or various popular sites on the internet like Youtube or Instagram, or even cross the street and look at a bus passing in front of you, you will exposure countless promotions, which persuade people by appealing procedures to spend more and more money on their new and fashionable products. The more people exposure to the ads, the more they will convince to buy and spend money on goods that maybe do not need at all. As a result, feasible to face a reduction in their budget to spend on healthier activities by the illustration to attend a club or gym.
On the other hand, if young people addicted to fashion obsessively, they will take some distance to other in-depth values, such as help their counterparts, especially financially. Furthermore, they may be altered to such robots which merely overwork to make money and then spend on new products to, based on the wrong attitude and cliché, remain fashionable and up-to-date. Such attitudes can cause detrimental and destructive effects on young people's personal and social lives.
To sum up, although due to the overwhelming surrounding of promotion in today's life, young people subconsciously are purchasing new products and dedicating considerable time to fashion. I am convinced that this trend will negatively impact their personal lives, also their values and ethics.
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 192, Rule ID: LOOK_WATCH[3]
Message: Did you mean 'watch'?
Suggestion: watch
...rend is not merely their faults. If you look at TV programs or various popular sites...
^^^^
Line 2, column 567, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'buying'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'convince' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: buying
...to the ads, the more they will convince to buy and spend money on goods that maybe do ...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, look, may, so, then, no doubt, such as, as a result, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 10.4138276553 211% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1552.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 304.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10526315789 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98246259029 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572368421053 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 475.2 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.0700668569 49.4020404114 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.333333333 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3333333333 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.66666666667 7.06120827912 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263482925229 0.244688304435 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0891571785693 0.084324248473 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0392198164482 0.0667982634062 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151465166998 0.151304729494 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0282090876024 0.056905535591 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.19 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 192, Rule ID: LOOK_WATCH[3]
Message: Did you mean 'watch'?
Suggestion: watch
...rend is not merely their faults. If you look at TV programs or various popular sites...
^^^^
Line 2, column 567, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'buying'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'convince' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: buying
...to the ads, the more they will convince to buy and spend money on goods that maybe do ...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, look, may, so, then, no doubt, such as, as a result, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 10.4138276553 211% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1552.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 304.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10526315789 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98246259029 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572368421053 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 475.2 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.0700668569 49.4020404114 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.333333333 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3333333333 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.66666666667 7.06120827912 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263482925229 0.244688304435 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0891571785693 0.084324248473 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0392198164482 0.0667982634062 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151465166998 0.151304729494 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0282090876024 0.056905535591 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.19 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.