Activities or sports are dangerous based on human perspective. Nowadays, a lot of people are attracted to dangerous sports or activities. Doing dangerous activities are very popular among the youth. In my view, the reasons for engaging in these activities lies in the basic human instinct and also having fame through these activities.
I think the primary reason why people are attracted to dangerous sports and activities lies in themselves. It is the basic human instinct that attract people to such activities. Some people feel bored doing the normal activities and they always look out for opportunities to do new activities, risk their life and have fun. For instance, I had a friend who always like to do activities, which I consider as dangerous, during his free time. He used to go for bike racing, boxing, scuba diving or sky diving during his weekends. He greatly enjoy, have fun and get relaxed doing these activities.
Another reason why people get attracted to these dangerous activities is the passion and fame associated with it. People gets noticed immediately when he or she does something out of the norm. For example, nowadays, there are a lot of people go for hiking on Mount Everest. Hiking there is very dangerous because any time you can get hit by an avalanche or slip off while stepping on a rock or ice. These can cause severe injuries and even death. Nevertheless, many people still go to Mount Everest because of the fame, glory and money associated with it.
In conclusion, people adore these dangerous activities because of the new experiences and fun it gives and also the fame that comes along with it. It helps us to get relaxed and also make money.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 496, Rule ID: SKY_DIVING[1]
Message: Did you mean 'skydiving'?
Suggestion: skydiving
...or bike racing, boxing, scuba diving or sky diving during his weekends. He greatly enjoy, ...
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Line 3, column 539, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'He' must be used with a third-person verb: 'enjoys'.
Suggestion: enjoys
... diving during his weekends. He greatly enjoy, have fun and get relaxed doing these a...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, nevertheless, so, still, while, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1407.0 1977.66487455 71% => OK
No of words: 288.0 407.700716846 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88541666667 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65317541741 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 212.727598566 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.517361111111 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 455.4 618.680645161 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.5685125981 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.1666666667 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.05555555556 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.299112623043 0.236089414692 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111769722265 0.076458572812 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112292316685 0.0737576698707 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189514291189 0.150856017488 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0703928292688 0.0645574589148 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.34 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 86.8835125448 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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