When we are trying to make an important decision, we tend to ask someone for the best. I think people should make an important decision alone. These are the following reasons: the result of the decision will affect on myself only, we do not have any assurance that the decision will be fine, we tend to abstain from our responsibility.
As a first, the person who were with me when I was making choices will be not with me when I have the outcome. In other words, after we made decision, taking care of consequences is not their business. When we are making choices, the people around me will not care of me that much. For instance, when I was in middle school, I was thinking to go to a vocational school. My homeroom teacher was concern of only school’s career; she only forced us to go to special purpose high school or public school. Finally, I chose public school. As a result, I needed to change my school because I wasn’t satisfied and my teacher was not part of this consequence.
Second, helping others on making decision can be bad even for the relationship since we do not know the future exactly. If the situation goes bad due to the choice that we chose together, I will feel very sorry and not be able to meet them again because of guilt. When I shared wrong exam material with my friend, I was not able to face her again since the result of the exam was bad because of me.
Moreover, if the the outcome of the choice that I made with others is bad, I might blame someone. People tend to shift their responsibility because people do not want to recognize the fact that they made things wrong. Even though having others to the process of making decision is their choice as well, people focus only to the fact that they affected to the wrong choice. As an example, “ because of you, mom” is the common situation that we can have. All the mothers help us including on determining the important choices; if the situation goes worse, we say it is because of mom.
To conclude, I believe that people should make an important decision alone on our own endeavor.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 209, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'effect'?
Suggestion: effect
...easons: the result of the decision will affect on myself only, we do not have any assuran...
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Line 3, column 231, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding people'?
Suggestion: the surrounding people
...r business. When we are making choices, the people around me will not care of me that much. For inst...
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Line 7, column 14, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
... was bad because of me. Moreover, if the the outcome of the choice that I made with ...
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Line 7, column 14, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
... was bad because of me. Moreover, if the the outcome of the choice that I made with ...
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Line 7, column 324, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...eir choice as well, people focus only to the fact that they affected to the wrong...
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Line 7, column 489, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[9]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to include' or 'include'.
Suggestion: to include; include
...at we can have. All the mothers help us including on determining the important choices; i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, moreover, second, so, well, for instance, i think, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 13.8261648746 22% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1721.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 382.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.50523560209 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49335758558 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.468586387435 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 540.9 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 13.0 3.51792114695 370% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.7219952106 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.5789473684 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1052631579 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.15789473684 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.14573915877 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0573748841018 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0737627291623 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108656111727 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0656356756976 0.0645574589148 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.88 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.19 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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