机经6
Finding a proper job is crucial for an individual’s career, even for those whose family has its own businesses. It has been widely debated whether working for business owned by someone else or working for family business is better for future development. While some argue that working for one’s own family is easier, I reckon, however, that it would be better to work for other businesses.
First of all, working for family business sparks too much pressure, which is harmful for the individual development. Suppose that we enter the business owned by our own family, since it is impractical that other workers in the business don’t know that we are somehow connected to the management, they probably think that we take the advantage of this relationship and obtain more than we deserve to. It is where the pressure appears，which affects our efficiency and subsequently causes more criticisms. On the contrary, all these won’t happen if we work for other businesses. We can cooperate with colleagues in harmony and fairly compete with them yet no one cast doubt on us. As a result, we will be burdened with less pressure compared to working for the family business.
Moreover, working for others’ businesses provides more possibilities. Instead of being confined in the field and handling the same work throughout the whole career in the family business, we will exploit more in other businesses. Instead of completing countless tasks without knowing whether or not we love the job given by family businesses, we might find a more attractive field that we are more willing to be devoted to. For example, a friend of mine firstly worked in a glass factory owned by his uncle, who offered him a job to supervise the cutting process. His job was secured but he gradually felt bored about the job and left the factory. Later, he met someone who persuaded him into becoming a cook at a restaurant. It didn’t take long before he realized that it was a more interesting career and he is delighted to have quit the previous job.
Admittedly, working in the business owned by others has some shortcomings. For instance, we might not get as secured a job as in the family business and whatever we do will be less familiar to us because we haven’t been exposed to it since childhood. However, if viewed from a different perspective, these disadvantages turned out to be beneficial because they will promote our competitiveness. In other words, working for others’ business is not as disadvantageous as it appears to be.
In conclusion, it’s better to work in the business owned by others than that owned by one’s family because the former presents several advantages such as avoidance of unfair criticism, diverse possibilities, and an opportunity to get over harsh situations.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 290, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...pleting countless tasks without knowing whether or not we love the job given by family busines...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, so, while, for example, for instance, i reckon, in conclusion, such as, as a result, first of all, in other words, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2376.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 466.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09871244635 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64618479453 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0214630377 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510729613734 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 759.6 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.3456322831 48.9658058833 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.142857143 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1904761905 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.28571428571 5.45110844103 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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