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Nowadays televisions show different types of advertisements which are harmful to older people let alone young children. Television advertisements show bad things that young children should not be allowed to watch them. I feel this way for two important reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
Television advertisements usually show sex toys which are really bad for young children to watch them. Such kind of things should not be allowed to shown in television. My brother's experience is a compelling example what I mean. Two years ago when I lived together in a villa with my family. My parents were busy with their work from early morning until late night. My brother who was five years old started watching television programs and there were many advertisements during the TV programs. After several days, my brother started talking about sex and sex toys. When my parents asked him where did you learn these words, he replied that he learnt all these interesting words in TV advertisements. From that day my parents began to control TV advertising from us. This example shows that children should not be allowed to watch advertisement.
Another popular advertisements are computer games that most of TV channels advertise. These advertisements are extremely harmful to young children. For instance, as I remember three years ago, I read a murder which happened between children in my town. It was written that one of the children watched a wide variety harmful advertisements in TV channels especially computer savage games. Watching these kind of awful advertisements one of the guys killed his brother with knife. This example demonstrates that advertisement has a negative influence for children.
Taking everything mentioned above into account, I firmly conclude that television advertisement should not be allowed for children to watch them. This is because TV advertising contains bad things such as sex toys and because TV adverting shows awful things that lead children to killing.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, really, so, for instance, i feel, i mean, kind of, such as, talking about
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 13.8261648746 22% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1696.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 322.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26708074534 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95672398703 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.527950310559 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 506.7 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.1908783755 48.9658058833 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 80.7619047619 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.3333333333 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.66666666667 5.45110844103 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.69 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.42 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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