agree or disagree/ to be successful in your future career, you have to make good relations, or you have to focus on your study.
Peoples' success depend on many factors, the most important one is related to their good connection and social ability. In my opinion, students should consider the importance of relations with their colleagues and professors more than the scores to be successful. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, people who are making good relationships with other students can get a lot of benefits. One of these benefits is getting an opportunity to work in big firms or starting new business. On the other hand, students who are concentrated on the study field without paying attention to their friendship, it will not guarantee students to be successful. Bill Gates Apple Microsoft Company is a compelling example of this. Bill Gates was average student at computer engineering University. However, he has a great relationship with his colleagues and his professors. On the other hand, the student who got honor at Bill Gates class was John Cassber, who was introverted person. Later, in their lives, Gates has made a huge company only because his relations with other students. He made small a group of smart and wealthy students, these students are not belong to rich families only, but also their families have good relations with other businessmen, which facilitated his work. which has led him to build this firm. Whereas, John became an employee in Bill company. As a result, people relations sometime they are more valuable than their study. If Bill Gates did not has made these smart relations, he would not built his huge success firm.
On the other hand, some students think success in future careers come from only high grades in universities. Therefore, they do not work on making a good connections and communications with their classmates. As a result, they will suffer to find a jobs later in their lives. For example, my brother, when he was at the university, he focused only on his study, which thing has made him ignored a friendships with other students. After five years of study, he faces a hard time to find a job. In spite of his high scores at university. Whereas, his other colleagues most of them are working in good companies or started their own businesses.
In conclusion, I believe making well relations with students are more important than the certificates. technically, people who make good relations at the universities are more successful than who are focusing on study only, and people who ignored the connections and relationships with other students will have suffered getting jobs after graduation.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, therefore, well, whereas, for example, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion, in spite of, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2170.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 431.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03480278422 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80742267646 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.480278422274 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 665.1 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.769714255 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.8 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.24 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.52 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 20.0 5.5376344086 361% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.102669568576 0.236089414692 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0298231126685 0.076458572812 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.032684406162 0.0737576698707 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0757446218642 0.150856017488 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0247122369299 0.0645574589148 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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