Agree or disagree society is strict with young people to obey society rules.
Youngsters are the most important part in our society. They are the future of this generation and they are leaders of new society. When communities become strict with these generation or soft, it is all for their best. However, many people see the societies should be hard with children for their best. On the other hand, some people are opposing this, personally, I agree with people who see children should be treated with more strict about rules and they should obey . In this short essay I will demonstrate my opinion in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, when youngsters treated in strict way, they will behave better . Which thing has insure their acceptance in the society later on in their lives. When we give over dose of freedom to children to do what they want to do, that could help to spoil them. As a result , they will behave in very unaccepted manner. This is can lead them to be ignored by society and between their peers. All that has negative effect on their future and their personality. My experience with my son is a compelling example of this. After my marriage, I faced a difficulties to be pregnant. Then after six years of waiting I got my son. Due to this , I pampered my son too much,which thing made him disobey and defy person. Later on in his life, he faced a lot of obstacles in the school . Since he was disobey , thing lead him to be unpleasant student in the class . Moreover, he cannot made a lot of friends in the school. All that have negative effect on his personality. If I had been strict with him, he would not have to face all these troubles in his life.
However, it is true that a lot of rules and strict things in young sters may overwhelm them. Moreover, this strict rules in the society like how to eat or how to speak with older people , could create a barrier between children and the society. On the other hand, this rule can create strong , well manner new generation , can lead the society to development . As I mentioned previously, If people and all society treat children softly , that may reduce their stress when they have to deal with older people. However, this also will not help them to build strong mannered personality, which thing can effect on their future careers and their personal lives. This thing has negative effect on the whole society.
In conclusion, I believe we have to be strict with young children s. This is because youngsters will learn how behave well with everyone in their lives, and they will become leaders of the good well obey, organize society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, well, in conclusion, as a result, it is true, on the whole, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 70.0 43.0788530466 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2089.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 452.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62168141593 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61088837703 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41652785352 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.446902654867 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 629.1 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 21.0 9.59856630824 219% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.5487299962 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.0344827586 100.406767564 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5862068966 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.68965517241 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 25.0 5.5376344086 451% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225037929202 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0593587925634 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0724983316282 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161916486299 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0521443445984 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.1 11.7677419355 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.22 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.69 8.01818996416 83% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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