recording wedding or graduation events
Living at the start of the new millennium, in the most advanced era in history, one is confronted with a plethora of information and knowledge which itself continues to become outdated at the moment. That keeps us little bit away from family and our personal life. Remembering such a great moments; like wedding or graduation, has a great impact on our feelings.
First of all, recording wedding or graduation and sharing these unique moments with or children, this would have a great influence on their lives. Nowadays, children can earn money at every young age; so they think there is no need to get advanced education. However, when children see their parents graduation that will courage them to continue their studies and graduate. For example, my son working as a receptionist in a dental clinic, with good wage, so he is not willing to attend university to graduation. I have spoken to him about the importance of having high certificate, but he never listened to me. But this was not for long time, after watched my graduation ceremonies, he changed his mind, this ceremonies has a wonderful effect on his opinion. As we have seen, sharing recorded moments like graduation might be effected more than any advice or a broad speech.
Besides sharing good memories with others, watching such a great video tab at a hard time could relief stress, and reduce our pain. A study has done by a group of psychologist revealed, that when people experienced a dilemma, or difficult situation, the best way to get out of that by recalling a nice moment they have been lived; after that study I have tried this by myself and it is worked. For instance, whenever I get in triple with my husband, or stressful situation, I tried to remember a happy time in my life: like watching my wedding video tab, I feel how I was blessed with such a husband and family. If I had not had such a record, I would have regretted they I have not recorded these events.
In conclusion, although some people argue that recording these events is quite expensive and they can save the money for more many things, but the advantages of recording these moments far outweigh the disadvantages. People can encourage their children to finish their high education for their own good, and to help them recall a great time with their loved one.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 215, Rule ID: LITTLE_BIT[1]
Message: Reduce redundancy by using 'little' or 'bit'.
Suggestion: little; bit
...e outdated at the moment. That keeps us little bit away from family and our personal life....
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Line 1, column 291, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'moment'?
Suggestion: moment
...personal life. Remembering such a great moments; like wedding or graduation, has a grea...
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Line 2, column 707, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...uation ceremonies, he changed his mind, this ceremonies has a wonderful effect on hi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, however, if, so, for example, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1913.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 403.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74689826303 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64151583771 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555831265509 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 596.7 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.1973418863 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.5625 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1875 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.25 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184416138834 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0581292280787 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0729927028791 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0972060693526 0.150856017488 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0484712098445 0.0645574589148 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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