people are more like to work some thing they do like even if low salary than do job do not like with high salary.
Most people agree that our work is the most important part in our life. It comes after family. Since it is in this importance so doing something that we like is better to us than working something do not like it. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, people who are working something they do wanted with low salary they can improve and develop in their work in fast and achieve way.which thing has great effect on their future careers. My own experience is a compelling example of this. After my graduation It was difficult to find a job in my major as a computer science. So I worked as a dental assistant to only to get some money cover my life expenses. It was the worst time in my life, Even if my salary was high but I could not improved in this job. Since I do like computers field. Later I got a chance to work in computer company with small salary. but I was knew that I can improved and developed in this job. As a result, I could with limited time turn from primary employee to the head of computer department. with satisfied salary. All of that because I loved my major and my improvement was logical since I like this job.
Furthermore, working in the environment that we like would give as an opportunity to meet people who are same our mindset and our interests. As I said above, I was like to work in a job improved my skill and my suit my experience in computers.So when I got a chance to work in the firm I had met a lot of new friends who are sharing with me the same interest and even hobbies. Therefore, when we meet together we talking about things that improve our company, and mostly we have same ideas and same intellectual level. This help me a lot to get along with them and make a group this could help us to do business work for our future.
n conclusion, I strongly believe that people should work at he major they do like no matter the salary how much. I feel this way because working in the major we do like it and experts at could help us to develop and become more successful in that major, and because give as an opportunity to meet people have same our interest and mindset.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, so, therefore, i feel, talking about, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 76.0 43.0788530466 176% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1764.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 414.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.26086956522 4.8611393121 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41977995149 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.45652173913 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 575.1 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.4513674628 48.9658058833 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.0 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7142857143 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.09523809524 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.5376344086 289% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.375738814725 0.236089414692 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113838686623 0.076458572812 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106536848221 0.0737576698707 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.24680900158 0.150856017488 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0435631003293 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.5 11.7677419355 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.43 10.9000537634 68% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.98 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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